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Do we ever listen to our own advice?

January 30, 2013
By SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
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I&#039;ve learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel. <br /> - Maya Angelou <br /> When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn&rsquo;t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out<br /> The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay<br /> If love produced a blossom/I&rsquo;d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I&rsquo;d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven<br /> And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

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Be an optimist, I say
Lusty desire resist, I say
Go dream, I say
Be united team, I say
Be selfless, I say

You’re never defenseless, I say
Forget, forgive, I say
Life is to live, I say

I say
I tell
I advise
And I pray
Like hell
To get a piece of the prize
Yet as I put to paper
All these things I say
Soliloquize
My eyes rise
To a moment of enlightenment
In a flurry, each page
Away, I rent
As thoughts become
Twisted and bent

I've rusted in grief
Optimism? That’s ironic.
Might have turned over a new leaf
Yet mine own words: not the tonic.
Once I even stopped dreaming
For fear of them being shattered
Lost faith and closed my eyes
To the blood being splattered
Oh yes, a grudge I've held
That rash still raw;
‘Cause rather unkindly once,
She showed me my flaw.
I've planned and daydreamed
Of the years to be
Though full well knowing
Of life’s uncertainty.

Take lesson from the Prophet Mohammad (P.B.U.H),
I must.
For he
Wouldn't consent to a poor woman’s plea
To advise her son
Against over-consumption of brown sugar
As was the kid’s wont.
Until three days later,
He (P.B.U.H) did advise the lad;
When he had, himself, forsaken the habit.

© Valcy E., Stony Point, NY

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MahnoorR BRONZE said...
on Oct. 9 2013 at 1:19 pm
MahnoorR BRONZE, Jhelum, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Do not pity the dead, Harry. Pity the living, and above all, those who live without love.&quot; -Albus Dumbledore, Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows<br /> <br /> &quot;When the well is empty, we know the worth of water.&quot;<br /> -William Shakespeare

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Inspiring. Brilliant. Perfect. Do I need to say anymore?
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND said...
on Feb. 18 2013 at 11:16 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1136 comments

Favorite Quote:
I&#039;ve learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel. <br /> - Maya Angelou <br /> When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn&rsquo;t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out<br /> The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay<br /> If love produced a blossom/I&rsquo;d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I&rsquo;d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven<br /> And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

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WOW,..you really KNOW how to truly interpret a poem...I'm not so good at that....And I'm so happy that you like it :))))))) Thank you ever so much for the feedback!
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND said...
on Feb. 18 2013 at 11:10 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1136 comments

Favorite Quote:
I&#039;ve learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel. <br /> - Maya Angelou <br /> When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn&rsquo;t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out<br /> The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay<br /> If love produced a blossom/I&rsquo;d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I&rsquo;d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven<br /> And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

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   :D
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND said...
on Feb. 17 2013 at 11:47 am
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
56 articles 0 photos 253 comments

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&quot;Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing.&quot; ~Camille Pissarro

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I like the way you built this up with a somewhat-choppy beginning and then longer, more complete lines towards the end. The flow that you created was a good way to heighten emotion. In addition, I think your word choice is excellent. The message in the poem is clear, but I can tell there are a lot of little hidden meanings scattered throughout. Great job!
JoPepper PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 17 2013 at 11:43 am
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Not all those who wander are lost&quot; --JRR Tolkien<br /> <br /> &quot;When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears.&quot; --Jose&#039; Bergamin

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Cool xD                
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND said...
on Feb. 17 2013 at 8:54 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1136 comments

Favorite Quote:
I&#039;ve learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel. <br /> - Maya Angelou <br /> When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn&rsquo;t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out<br /> The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay<br /> If love produced a blossom/I&rsquo;d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I&rsquo;d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven<br /> And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

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Oh... well He's much more to me kind of like a role model..
JoPepper PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 16 2013 at 10:29 am
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Not all those who wander are lost&quot; --JRR Tolkien<br /> <br /> &quot;When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears.&quot; --Jose&#039; Bergamin

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You're welcome and I just meant that I liked hhow you brought a religious figure into your poem xD
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND said...
on Feb. 15 2013 at 11:31 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1136 comments

Favorite Quote:
I&#039;ve learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel. <br /> - Maya Angelou <br /> When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn&rsquo;t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out<br /> The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay<br /> If love produced a blossom/I&rsquo;d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I&rsquo;d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven<br /> And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

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I'm glad thta you liked it     :)))))))))      and....what do you mean "If that makes any sense"??
JoPepper PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 15 2013 at 3:26 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Not all those who wander are lost&quot; --JRR Tolkien<br /> <br /> &quot;When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears.&quot; --Jose&#039; Bergamin

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I really liked this, I liked how you brought in a religious figure to this to prove your point.  (If that makes any sense) xD
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND said...
on Feb. 15 2013 at 11:22 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1136 comments

Favorite Quote:
I&#039;ve learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel. <br /> - Maya Angelou <br /> When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn&rsquo;t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out<br /> The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay<br /> If love produced a blossom/I&rsquo;d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I&rsquo;d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven<br /> And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

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Oh Thank You so much!!  I'm glad you liked it...I was kinda well since most people on this website are Americans, maybe they won't like the ending that much but I'm so happy you liked it..... I wanted to explain how He (P.B.U.H) is the one I always look up to and how He (PBUH) is the perfect person to look up to because every incident of his life is just perfect..... In this poem specifically I wanted to portray how we never never listen to stuff others preach but also we don't listen to ourselves either..... Again Thank You for reading....Keep checkin out my stuff...Your feedback is Gold!  Thank YOu. :D
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND said...
on Feb. 14 2013 at 10:13 pm
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
59 articles 24 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead; <br /> I lift my lids and all is born again.<br /> (I think I made you up inside my head).&quot;<br /> -Sylvia Plath

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This is fantastic :D I enjoyed reading the begining, quickly grasping your very true, very relatable theme. The end was also superb, and I found it interesting how you worked the Prophet Mohammad into it. Great poem!