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Sonnet MAG

January 24, 2008
By Anonymous

In dreamlike daze, one floats and cannot stop
With bare feet gliding ’long the raised walkway
Beneath the trees whose virgin shadows drop
Athwart the planks of splint’ry wood they lay.
Reaching ’cross creams and ash of peeling bark
The satin fingers stroke old Nature’s charm,
While eyes of magic shift toward dazzling arc –
That blazing orb gives breath without alarm.
The sudden hush of summer’s air abide –
(Sultry conditions welcome beads of sweat)
The birds, whose squawking jests have bared their pride,
For only heat could make them that upset.
One body, in a world of sun-swept beams
Where Nature’s heartbeats force realistic dreams.



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on Jun. 2 2010 at 9:36 pm
GinryuStargazer BRONZE, N/A, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
This world is just a battleground for ideals.

This was a pretty good poem, though I realized teh iambic pentameter was off in a couple places, such as "Walkway" in line two for example. Just peer editing! :) I am a striving sonnet poet myself.

on May. 11 2010 at 7:58 pm
BlueInk94 PLATINUM, Valley Park, Missouri
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this is really good. so pretty and i loev your old-fashioned vocab use. Shakespearean?

Aaron said...
on Apr. 19 2010 at 8:27 pm
Wow, very impressed. You summed up nature's glory in 14 rhyming lines. 5 stars!

on Apr. 19 2010 at 6:19 pm
pedrobob BRONZE, Waterford, Other
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Quite good. Bravo

Eilatan GOLD said...
on Apr. 19 2010 at 3:39 pm
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."

if i could write fewer than ten letters, i would just write 'wow'.

 

wow.


on Apr. 19 2010 at 9:39 am
Swindlewick SILVER, ..., Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"I do not agree with what you have to say, but I will defend to the death your right to say it." ~Voltaire

I like this! I like this a lot.

Art4ever123 said...
on Oct. 3 2009 at 5:41 pm
That was great! Very discriptive, and i love the way you made it sound Shakespearian! keep writing!

on Sep. 19 2009 at 5:24 pm
TimeMachine SILVER, Mercer Island, Washington
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Wow. That was filled with vivid imagery and I love (for the lack of a stronger word) your word choice.

Great job.

on May. 16 2009 at 7:28 pm
CarrieAnne11 GOLD, Potsdam, New York
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Omg. that is all i can say! But of course, I mean it in a good way!

OpenMinded said...
on Dec. 12 2008 at 4:18 am
This is inspiring. The imagery is wonderful and the words flow steadily. Nothing clashes or seems to skip when I read it, its so smooth.


Amazing, truely an simply. I look forward to seeing your work on a bookstore shelf someday.

the candyman said...
on Nov. 20 2008 at 6:28 pm
god stuff right there.

JennyHuang said...
on Nov. 19 2008 at 1:16 am
Very descriptive. Good imagery. :)

L-I-S-H- said...
on Nov. 8 2008 at 6:51 am
kewl poem...it's awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! =)

Teriesa said...
on Sep. 3 2008 at 8:59 pm
I've got to say. Poetry for me in the first place is hard. You're writing Sonnets! I'm impressed and awed. Fantastic job. Shakespeare would be happy.