Okay, thanks, Lexus!

Hello, my friend! I am not a songwriter so I probably shouldn't give tips on how to write one. I enjoy the concept and the title, but it seemed like it got repetitive. The first two stanzas(?), I don't know what they are called in songs, are good and I think they should be kept. I think they should actually be reversed so that the second one is actually the beginning of the song and I think that the one that starts 'I told you that for you' should be the chorus. Now, you have the title, the beginning, and the chorus. So, I think you should continue with the nature-esque feel and try to pick up some other stuff to add into the song to go after the beginning and between the chorus. Maybe two more stanzas(?). It will go beginning (second stanza that you have right now), a new stanza that you come up with, chorus, another new stanza that you come up with, and then end with the chorus repeated. (OR after you do the chorus repeated you could add a two lined stanza to end it.) Now, again, I am no songwriter, but I tried! Overall, I think this has potential and I like where it's going. Good luck and I hope I helped!

Okay, thanks!

Not in love with it, but for your first poem it was pretty good :) just think its missing something.