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Time Takes a Breath MAG

February 27, 2009
By Keegan Watters SILVER, Dallas, Texas
Keegan Watters SILVER, Dallas, Texas
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I sit with my feet up on the dashboard,
music bursting from the speakers in rhythmic little puffs,
windows rolled down just enough so I can dangle my left hand over the edge.

I can faintly hear the wind pecking at the cracks on the door,
sending the puddles of water on the ground into frantic ripples
and propelling crackled autumn leaves onto my car windshield.

I close my eyes and listen to the storm battering around me,
enjoying the balmy sensation of the car vents breathing hot air,
warming my skin despite the bitter cold outside.

For once I have nowhere to be, no deadlines to meet, no class to rush to,
and so I stay here just a little while longer while the world races on around me.

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smittyy BRONZE said...
on Jan. 11 2010 at 2:15 pm
smittyy BRONZE, Mchenry, Illinois
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this is truely beautiful and embraces the nice things in life.

DaveyWavey;] said...
on Jan. 11 2010 at 8:25 am
I really enjoyed this piece. Your choice of words was beautiful. As I was reading this, I put myself in your shoes and really began to feel the magic of the situation.

on Dec. 20 2009 at 8:33 pm
...PensiveGurl... PLATINUM, Aurora, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
You get ideas from daydreaming. You get ideas from being bored. You get ideas all the time. The only difference between writers and other people is we notice when we're doing it- Neil Gaiman.
Who are you to be who you are?-Le'Na Pernell

I liked how descriptive the poem was. It's really beautiful. I can see why it was put in the magazine >.<

on Dec. 20 2009 at 2:05 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

Wow that's so good. A lot of times I like to put simple things to words and make them magical like you did. Very impressive.

Curly_Sue said...
on Dec. 20 2009 at 1:20 pm
Curly_Sue, Sand Springs, Oklahoma
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Wow. Really really good. It makes an ordinary situation seem magical.

on Dec. 20 2009 at 12:25 pm
sasssgirrrl22 PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Giving up is not a part of my vocabulary."
"Don't let the fear of striking out keep you from playing the game."
"Truth be told I miss ya, truth be told I'm lying."

wow i luv this poem. sets a kOoL different perspective that many can relate 2. gr8 job :)

on Dec. 20 2009 at 10:38 am
montana PLATINUM, Parker, Colorado
41 articles 2 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
cliche quotes I have are.....
I know, right? and..... Are you kidding me?

I like the nature descriptions you put in. PLZ CHECK MY WORK OUT. THX IN ADVANCE.

*let it snow, white*

artlove BRONZE said...
on Dec. 20 2009 at 1:48 am
artlove BRONZE, Cartersville, Georgia
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I like the simplicity of the piece, thats what makes ppl relate to it as well as feel the emotion behind it. The only negative thing i can say is that the word "little" could be avoided because it doesnt really fit or flow.

on Nov. 28 2009 at 8:23 pm
anikasaurus BRONZE, Saint Paul, Minnesota
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So simplistic, yet saying exactly what it needs to say. Thumbs up.

on Nov. 6 2009 at 5:10 pm
PalindromeGirl BRONZE, Beverly, Massachusetts
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you did a really excellent job of showing feeling in this piece. i loved how calm it was, kudos! my one critique is that at points it was a bit prose-y. but in general great poem!!!!

on Nov. 6 2009 at 5:07 pm
Breakdancegrl SILVER, San Antonio, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Anything below perfection is complete and utter failure" Hugh Himwich
"What the hell is a Hufflepuff?" Dumbledore: A Very Potter Musical

Luv it, beautiful

Ali.B GOLD said...
on Nov. 6 2009 at 3:31 pm
Ali.B GOLD, Lexington, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
I write whatever flows from my fingers- AJY

I love this. I wish i had more time just to sit, relax, and enjoy life like you express in this poem.

naya_123 said...
on Nov. 6 2009 at 10:59 am
i looooove this story geze its awesome

Cady said...
on Oct. 15 2009 at 9:11 pm
I loved it and i thought it was pretty good because you didn't say what you tell that you were in the car. It was great. I liked it.

jFerragonio said...
on Oct. 15 2009 at 8:47 pm
This poem vividly expresses a clear picture in the readers mind. It allows you to feel and picture what is going on. I loved when the speaker said, "I can faintly hear the wind pecking at the cracks on the door, sending the puddles of water on the ground into frantic ripples and propelling crackled autumn leaves onto my car windshield." This clearly expressed that wind is blowing against the car, water makes splashes as the car drives over it and crackled autumn leaves brush against the windshield. That statement makes a descriptive picture in my mind. All around I enjoyed this poem and thought it was very well written.

Griecon said...
on Oct. 15 2009 at 5:57 pm
This is such a great poem! I really can feel like I am sitting in the car while being smothered in cold are, then warm air shoots out and you feel relieved. Then how you explained that you were in your own little place for a few moments in time where nothing matters and you can relax before joining the busy world again.

on Oct. 15 2009 at 4:53 pm
ok so wow you definitely write with your soul. Its true. We usually have so much to worry about. Unlike when we were younger and the biggest priority we had was to have fun, and the worst part of your day was you had to wait on the grass while you let your friend ride your bike. Drinking capri suns. Well. I can not wait till the day i can feel what you are writing about to the fullest. Only then will i truly live....


-Cherish Faith.

kamenice said...
on Oct. 15 2009 at 4:05 pm
This is one of those poems where you just feel comfortable, because even though I'm not there, I can imagine myself sitting in the car and just relaxing. You create a sense of freedom when you say "For once I have nowhere to be, no deadlines to meet, and no class to rush to..." It makes me wish that i could do the same and just relax and do nothing. Good Job.

on Aug. 2 2009 at 1:56 am
RadioShower PLATINUM, Rio Rancho, New Mexico
23 articles 5 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
Emo is imaginary - Gerard Way
Normalness leads to sadness -Phil Lester (AmazingPhil)

interesting! Sounds like something i would be doing!

on Jun. 28 2009 at 8:06 am
cheyenneduhon PLATINUM, Lumberton, Texas
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I loved it! Lets just say we Texans know how to write!!