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And I Burn

February 2, 2016
By Wordfreak SILVER, Aurora, Colorado
Wordfreak SILVER, Aurora, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;He who makes a beast out of himself gets rid of the pain of being a man.&quot; - Doc Johnson<br /> &quot;It&#039;s not the size of the dog in the fight. It&#039;s the size of the fight in the dog.&quot; -Ivan Moody, FFDP


I light a match.
It springs to life and greets me.
The heat caresses my fingers.
The fire whispers sweet promises to me of love and caring
It promises not to bite me.
It asks, no begs me to let it feed, to let it grow.
So I do.
I stare up at the raging inferno.
The fire laughs at me.
It cackles.
It promised love but brought destruction.
And the one thing that was not human.
The one thing I loved.
The one thing that I trusted.
Betrayed me.
And I burn.


The author's comments:

Written in a moment of questioning.


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kissthemoon said...
on Jul. 18 2017 at 10:33 pm
kissthemoon, Miami Beach, Florida
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I love this so much. The idea in it is so deep and meaningful. Keep on writing!

on Feb. 25 2016 at 12:44 pm
ContemplatingTortoise, Iowa City, Iowa
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HI dude did u miss me buddy just wait and see what happens to you

on Feb. 23 2016 at 11:54 pm
AWriter101 SILVER, Rockton, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
being single doesn&#039;t mean you are week it means that you are strong enough to wait for what you deserve! -Niall Horan

This is awesome!!!

on Feb. 19 2016 at 11:04 am
CHEYENNE_BOTDF_4_U, Farmington, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
Haters make me famous

nice poem very detailed in your work

Lunch SILVER said...
on Feb. 12 2016 at 11:49 am
Lunch SILVER, Manila, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;There is always something left to love.&quot; &ndash; Gabo Marquez

It hints at something insightful. I suppose there's a number of ways to interpret this, and that's what makes for good poetry. So here's my spin: it's about the danger of ideas, particularly heretical ones. A righteous person who entertains doubts about the truth of his religion might easily find himself spiraling down a (depending on your view) self-destruction. That's how I saw it, at least. On to the poem itself. There are a couple issues I have with the meter. I know it's free verse, but there's a jarring bite to the break of rhythm (unless that's the effect you were going for, in which case, congratulations). For example, in the first two lines, you were going for an iambic meter (i/LIGHT/a/MATCH; it/SPRINGS/to/LIFE/and/GREETS/me), but in the fourth line, you suddenly switch: the/FIRE/WHIS/pers... It's not really that big of an issue, especially in free verse, but it's a thing you might want to pay attention to, in case you unintentionally jolt your readers. You could also step up the imagery here. I'm sure you're above lines like, "the fire laughs at me". But all-in-all, this isn't a bad poem by any measure, and I'll eagerly await more of your poetry.

gremlin BRONZE said...
on Feb. 11 2016 at 3:50 pm
gremlin BRONZE, Auburn, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Blood makes you related, Loyalty makes you family

FEEL THE BURN

MBC1215 BRONZE said...
on Feb. 11 2016 at 3:15 pm
MBC1215 BRONZE, Chattanooga, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I see now that the circumstances of ones birth are irrelevant.It&#039;s what you do with the gift of life that determines who you are.&quot;-Mewtwo:Pokemon movie #1

AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!

on Feb. 8 2016 at 7:39 pm
TheNamesBond....JamesBond BRONZE, Galloway, New Jersey
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Pleasure to burn

on Feb. 6 2016 at 12:44 pm
Blackjack. GOLD, Suffolk, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Take a lesson from &quot;the Greatest Man That Ever Lived,&quot; Austin Aries. The ambition and vision of one depends on how bad@ss they look in sunglasses.&quot; - Me, 2017<br /> <br /> &quot;Who is this Jose, and why is he always being denied?&quot; - Corey Graves, 2016

Now this is burning art right here!

on Feb. 6 2016 at 12:09 pm
Maculate_Dream DIAMOND, Riverside, California
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Favorite Quote:
I have not failed, I just found 10,000 ways to not succeed.<br /> <br /> All that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream.

Beautifully written and very intriguing from the start, and lines are organized. Very well thought out poem.

Angelinaxox said...
on Feb. 6 2016 at 7:03 am
Angelinaxox,
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Thats really good. I love it!