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Seeing right through. MAG

February 10, 2015
By CookieMonster24 PLATINUM, Delhi, Other
CookieMonster24 PLATINUM, Delhi, Other
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I am not a poet
I am a jigsaw
Breaking laws of rhyme and diction
I am a crafter of mixed metals and
Mixed metaphors
Your high school English teacher would hate me
And boys would never date me
So I built myself a wall of books
Threw together line and hook
I’ll slip this note under my Sylvia Plath pile
And hope that you will be the one to deshelf me
But as I recall
You never were a huge fan of fishing.



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wordtea GOLD said...
on Aug. 2 2015 at 11:48 am
wordtea GOLD, Delhi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&#039;All men shall die.&#039;- A Clash of Kings<br /> &#039;We accept the love we think we deserve.&#039;- The Perks of Being a Wallflower<br /> &#039;Sometimes people are beautiful. Not in looks. Not in what they say. Just in what they are.&#039;- The Book Thief

hello. are you god?

on Feb. 16 2015 at 10:35 pm
Ray--yo PLATINUM, Kathmandu, Other
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Favorite Quote:
God Makes No Mistakes. (Gaga?)<br /> &quot;I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right.&quot; -Liesel Meminger via Markus Zusac, &quot;The Book Thief&quot;

if only there was someplace private here on TI, haha

on Feb. 16 2015 at 9:15 am
CookieMonster24 PLATINUM, Delhi, Other
25 articles 2 photos 147 comments
I would love to tell you. But somewhere private, please? :p @Ray--yo

on Feb. 16 2015 at 6:41 am
Ray--yo PLATINUM, Kathmandu, Other
43 articles 2 photos 581 comments

Favorite Quote:
God Makes No Mistakes. (Gaga?)<br /> &quot;I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right.&quot; -Liesel Meminger via Markus Zusac, &quot;The Book Thief&quot;

Hey the tag thing works! I personally saw 'fishing' as seeking something seemingly hidden. If you don't mind, can I ask what your original sense was?

on Feb. 13 2015 at 6:35 pm
Writer13 BRONZE, Washington, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;May your mouth sing and your soul soar, but if your heart breaks that&#039;s all the more whole-hearted the words will make you, and you will soon unlock the summit of understanding.&quot; ~quote by me

@CookieMonster24 Thats cool! ;) I've wanted to try that :)

on Feb. 13 2015 at 11:54 am
CookieMonster24 PLATINUM, Delhi, Other
25 articles 2 photos 147 comments
Aw, thank you! And of course it's open to interpretation but I'd love to know what exactly came to your mind about "You never were a huge fan of fishing." @Ray--yo

on Feb. 13 2015 at 11:52 am
CookieMonster24 PLATINUM, Delhi, Other
25 articles 2 photos 147 comments
@Writer13 forgot to tag you. Also wanted to see if this tagging thing really works haha.

on Feb. 13 2015 at 11:51 am
CookieMonster24 PLATINUM, Delhi, Other
25 articles 2 photos 147 comments
Thank you for the lovely comment.

on Feb. 13 2015 at 9:36 am
Ray--yo PLATINUM, Kathmandu, Other
43 articles 2 photos 581 comments

Favorite Quote:
God Makes No Mistakes. (Gaga?)<br /> &quot;I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right.&quot; -Liesel Meminger via Markus Zusac, &quot;The Book Thief&quot;

*earlier version

on Feb. 13 2015 at 7:39 am
Ray--yo PLATINUM, Kathmandu, Other
43 articles 2 photos 581 comments

Favorite Quote:
God Makes No Mistakes. (Gaga?)<br /> &quot;I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right.&quot; -Liesel Meminger via Markus Zusac, &quot;The Book Thief&quot;

love the fishing metaphor. I'd read the original version only a couple of days ago, actually; glad to see this get the editor's choice. Congratulations!

on Feb. 12 2015 at 11:31 pm
Writer13 BRONZE, Washington, Illinois
2 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;May your mouth sing and your soul soar, but if your heart breaks that&#039;s all the more whole-hearted the words will make you, and you will soon unlock the summit of understanding.&quot; ~quote by me

I really liked the first part where you talked about breaking the rules in writing. Writing is like art, there shouldn't be rules on what and how to write...that's for the author to decide. :)