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Cleansing Rain

November 29, 2011
By Sinc321 BRONZE, Centerville, Ohio
Sinc321 BRONZE, Centerville, Ohio
3 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hold the line!"


Rain wipes away the sorrow and dread;
cleans off the blemishes from the face of the day;
Washes off all the fear and doubt like a kid licks his fingers clean;
time for a new beginning;
let the new day's light shine.


The author's comments:
I wrote this because some many people don't like the rain, and I love the rain. I wanted to show people that rain isn't as bad as they think. The rain can actually be cleansing.

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on Dec. 13 2011 at 8:30 pm
Noni3280 BRONZE, Warrnambool, Other
3 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
Take each day as it comes.

cool as, who doesnt love the rain!

Sinc321 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 8 2011 at 7:35 pm
Sinc321 BRONZE, Centerville, Ohio
3 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hold the line!"

thanks but i was kinda going for the run on, not a complete thought untill the end thing though. but ill keep that in mind =)

 


on Dec. 8 2011 at 7:33 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1646 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

This is excellent!  My only criticism would be that you should consistently capitalize your words or put in periods when a 'sentence' ends.  Other than that, excellent work! :)

Sinc321 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 8 2011 at 3:57 pm
Sinc321 BRONZE, Centerville, Ohio
3 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hold the line!"

awsome, thanks =)

on Dec. 7 2011 at 8:37 pm
Amery2014 BRONZE, Star Prairie, Wisconsin
2 articles 0 photos 4 comments
I think this is really good.  You should add on to it.  It will make it even better.  This is really inspiring too :)

Sinc321 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 7 2011 at 7:53 pm
Sinc321 BRONZE, Centerville, Ohio
3 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hold the line!"

haha well rain is the best kinda weather, i love summer rain storms! expectaly with my gf those are the best nights ever

 


on Dec. 7 2011 at 7:51 pm
DaughteroftheTrumpet BRONZE, East Aurora, New York
2 articles 2 photos 214 comments

Favorite Quote:
Washington Irving once said “There is sacredness in tears. They are not the mark of weakness, but of power. They are messengers of overwhelming grief and of unspeakable love.”

There are so many songs relating to rain and it's healing powers, and this just sums that right up. Nice job!

Sinc321 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 7 2011 at 7:22 pm
Sinc321 BRONZE, Centerville, Ohio
3 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hold the line!"

thanks! =) i love the feed back

ninja17 SILVER said...
on Dec. 7 2011 at 7:19 pm
ninja17 SILVER, Las Cruces, New Mexico
6 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes we tend to be in despair when the person we love leaves us, but the truth is, it's not our loss, but theirs, for they left the only person who wouldn't give up on them."

I love it! I can somehow relate to it and it was deep :) 5 stars! 

Sinc321 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 7 2011 at 5:48 pm
Sinc321 BRONZE, Centerville, Ohio
3 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hold the line!"

thanks so much for the feed back, i'll see what i can do =)

on Dec. 7 2011 at 5:32 pm
Musawwir21 SILVER, Toledo, Ohio
6 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
Some say the world will end in fire,
Some say in ice.
From what I've tasted of desire
I hold with those who favor fire.
But if it had to perish twice,
I think I know enough of hate
To say that for destruction ice
Is also great
And would suffice.

Umm . sweetie great strong beginning it would be even better if you completed it . I understand poems take a long time but time is a beautiful thing . Please finish it . I love where its going . <3