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Evening

May 13, 2011
By Sorla_the_Space_Cowboy GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
Sorla_the_Space_Cowboy GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;Sometimes if you want to see a change for the better, you have to take things into your own hands.&rdquo; - Clint Eastwood<br /> &quot;I never lie. I believe everything I say, so it&#039;s not a lie.&quot; - Mark Wahlberg<br /> &quot;I just want to be pure&quot;- Jim Carroll


We only look for tomorrow. Sharp sounds give us the time. Inside and outside all at once. Gray buildings give off long shadows. There is a small girl petting a large dog. Feeble greens burst through cracked pavement. The girl is sad. The girl only looks for tomorrow. Lights go on. Our eyes adjust to ink and fluorescence. We take the girl with us, for she is sad and abused. We wander away.
I only smell smoke, there is no coffee left. Do you feel empty as well? Crushed dreams fall out of windows and under the wheels of dusty cars. The air is full of smoke. Africa seems nice right now. I’m sick of giant dogs and broken-winged birds. The girl is crying but I don’t know what to do. The city is large and we are small. If that is good or bad I’m yet to find out. I can’t stop my shaking for much longer. Soon it will be evening again.

The author's comments:
A tribute to Jim Carroll, my favorite poet. We have all had days like these.

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taylor1226 said...
on Dec. 4 2011 at 8:29 pm
taylor1226, Alexandria, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
grrs.

very interesting.I liked it.:)

on Oct. 7 2011 at 10:18 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~<br /> ~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~<br /> ~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than<br /> a distant memory.~

love this <3

on Jun. 18 2011 at 11:17 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by.&quot; --Douglas Adams<br /> <br /> &quot;The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane.&quot; --Marcus Aurelius

Hmm...this was a very different poem.  I think you should have put your sentences on separate lines, seeing as this is a poem.  Other than that, I like the mood of the poem.