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Black Ice

February 5, 2011
By lilmartz PLATINUM, Perrysburg, Ohio
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lilmartz PLATINUM, Perrysburg, Ohio
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Live Life Like A Party That Never Ends

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Stone cold heart
Sheathed in a hard layer of ice.
So thick a covering,
Nothing can penetrate
This protective shield.
An empty black abyss
With nothing left to give away.
Isolated deep within its closed cavity,
Sealed shut and never to be opened,
Frozen for all of eternity.
A gorgeous nightmare
Shining like crystals in the moonlight.
Barely visible but nonetheless dangerous,
As it sinks below into the depths
Of a bitter winters night.
Love will no longer melt
Your iced black heart.

© Steve S., Marblehead, MA

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Eshshah PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 30 2011 at 7:48 am
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
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"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep." -Robert Frost

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the poem is so dark, It sort of made my stomach drop as I read it- I really like "frozen for all eternity" line, It flows well for a non-ryme poem, but kind of gives me chills- only one thing ( the "barely visible" line seems a tad long.
Afanen PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 9 2011 at 1:13 pm
Afanen PLATINUM, Santa Rosa, California
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"But you see, Meg, just because we don't understand doesn't mean that the explanation doesn't exist."


- Madeleine L'Engle, A Wrinkle in Time

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This is lovely, I especially like the 'gorgeous nightmare' line. Two things: a) 'winters night' ought to be 'winter's night,' and I think the 'so thick…' line (just the one) is a little clunky and could use some editing.
emma0314 BRONZE said...
on Mar. 21 2011 at 3:59 pm
emma0314 BRONZE, Arlington, Virginia
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"You need chaos in your soul to give birth to a dancing star." Friedrich Nietzsche

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Very nice! I can tell that you really care about what you are writing :)
Camii GOLD said...
on Mar. 13 2011 at 1:07 pm
Camii GOLD, Miami, Florida
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I liked it!! It's really good! I like how it describes the heart and then it says : love will no longer melt your iced black heart.
LittleMidnight PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 6 2011 at 5:46 pm
LittleMidnight PLATINUM, Glendale, Arizona
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I could really feel a shiver. I love this one its wonderful. I gave it five stars!!! Good work.
amandap PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 27 2011 at 10:09 am
amandap PLATINUM, Midlothian, Virginia
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the last two lines.... wow. I especially love the line "A gorgeous nightmare". The flow reminds me slightly of staccato, which I love reading, and it works nicely. All of the lines are mature and seem like they were given great amounts of thought. Five stars :)
ChrisinTechnicolor BRONZE said...
on Feb. 26 2011 at 11:13 am
ChrisinTechnicolor BRONZE, Orange, Texas
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Imagery is good and the flow is nice.

The poem itself is straightforward and easy to understand. You're a talented young lady -- keep up the good work.(:

Internal-Love PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 23 2011 at 9:58 pm
Internal-Love PLATINUM, Queens, New York
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Nothing's black or white, its all just a shade of gray---

















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Oh my gosh!! This piece is so pretty and mysterious!! You truly know how to weave words into your grasp and turn them into true poetry.

i was lost in your magical words!! They've got power, because they sure are powerful!!

Jule92xc BRONZE said...
on Feb. 22 2011 at 11:01 pm
Jule92xc BRONZE, Smithsburg, Maryland
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"It's not who I am underneath, but what I do that defines me..." -Batman

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I really thought the last two lines were incredibly powerful. "Love will no longer melt/Your iced black heart." I think this is one of your best poems =]