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The Dead Girl. MAG

March 20, 2009
By Courtney Billow BRONZE, Richfield, Pennsylvania
Courtney Billow BRONZE, Richfield, Pennsylvania
3 articles 0 photos 4 comments

I found the dead girl in a lake
while wandering a field
I watched the crows circle around
but somehow I could feel.

I saw her lying near the edge
to no fault of her own.
And walking nearer helped me see
that which I did not know.

I wanted to reach out to her
and grab her by the soul.
I wanted to hold on to her,
I dare not let her go.

I feel she’s lost so much, but if
I help her then she’ll see
the truth behind love in this life
and how real this love can be.

But someone’s let her down before.
Someone has let her fall.
And if her soul cannot find rest,
I fear she’ll lose it all.

Between my pity and her pain
she told me something true.
She feels that she’s lost everything
with nothing left to lose.

I’ve studied more intently, finding
fate’s no more than luck.
Just a gamble of “which way”
Does it deserve such trust?

Finally, I’ve found the nerve
to cradle up her soul
and send it flying far, far up
to the place I’ll never know.

The author's comments:
I was watching a movie. And suddenly I had THE urge....

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on Jan. 21 2011 at 8:23 pm
XleopoldineX BRONZE, Ny, New York
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wow this is really good

on Dec. 9 2010 at 11:29 am
starsandotherthings BRONZE, Grand Isle, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
" To be old and wise, you must first be young and stupid" "Paper is more patient than man"

this was a beautiful poem. its deep, sad, and idk what else but it was beautiful... keep writing i want to read more

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on Dec. 8 2010 at 9:26 am
Duckie430, Riverside, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
“The secret to life is being who you are and being happy with who you are.”
"Whatever does not kill you only makes you stronger."

i'm not really sure what this is about...but i like it :)

on Nov. 17 2010 at 9:53 am
BlueInk94 PLATINUM, Valley Park, Missouri
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i love this. its very.......i cant explain but i love it!

HahlehAnn said...
on Nov. 16 2010 at 2:33 pm
HahlehAnn, Cameron, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
"I can accept failure, everyone fails at something. But i can't accept not trying." -Micheal Jordan
"Life is what happens when your to busy making other plans." -John Lennon

wow, it was amazing. love how you set the mood of it.

on Oct. 25 2010 at 3:18 pm
I thought that this poem was good on so many levels I hope that you continue writing this really gets deep into your emotion.

on Oct. 20 2010 at 1:32 pm
Treckintime SILVER, Bradenton, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"Do not let others believe what you can achieve, but achieve what you believe."

i like it so much i really do. its moving. and sad. im sorry:/

on Oct. 3 2010 at 10:51 pm
spiritualrevelationrevealspainandrevolution PLATINUM, Eugene, Oregon
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extremely symbolic, rate mine?

ellie315 GOLD said...
on Sep. 11 2010 at 1:05 pm
ellie315 GOLD, South Pasadena, California
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Favorite Quote:
"And this, our life, exempt from public haunt, finds tongues in trees, books in the running brooks, sermons in stones, and good in everything." -- William Shakespeare

WOW. so good. REALLY good. i love this!

on Aug. 17 2010 at 3:39 am
mcbob_kool SILVER, Monticello, Indiana
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I really like this poem. It has a darkly elegant flow to it. Check out my new poem?

on Jul. 18 2010 at 2:39 pm
Kaileigh918 BRONZE, Orange Park, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"There's no shortcuts to anywhere worth going"

wow great work

on May. 20 2010 at 8:11 am
CountryGothic GOLD, Somersworth, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
"Once something has been said, it cannot be said in other words." -Aristotle

Beautiful is the first word that comes to my mind when I read this. I love this poem and you darn well better write more like it!!! :)

on Feb. 4 2010 at 4:02 pm
I agree, not a lot of peole can write like that. SOOOOOOOOOOOOO good.

AmnyR BRONZE said...
on Feb. 3 2010 at 8:56 pm
AmnyR BRONZE, Clifton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
To the world, you may be just one person, but to one person, you may be the whole world. ~unknown

very very good!

on Jan. 17 2010 at 5:39 pm
Courtney Billow BRONZE, Richfield, Pennsylvania
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thank you so much :]

on Jan. 16 2010 at 10:54 pm
very_literary SILVER, Ballwin, Missouri
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I love how well this poem flows and the symbolism within it. Keep up the good work, you are a really, really talented writer!!! Great job!

on Jan. 16 2010 at 9:48 am
Dandelion PLATINUM, Franklin, Massachusetts
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I love this poem! You did an excellent job at keeping a steady meter, as well.

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on Jan. 14 2010 at 10:28 am
i love the emotion in this and the picture it painted in my mind.

ayoo. said...
on Dec. 23 2009 at 9:12 am
Thank you so much :]

on Dec. 21 2009 at 9:07 am
LeilaniLives PLATINUM, Fort Wayne, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"They say 'Life's two steps forward and one step back' - But what if I tripped and fell down the whole flight of stairs?"

I loved the concept and symbolism. Keep writing, just imagine what you could become if you continued.