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Alan

December 10, 2008
By Duggygrrl BRONZE, Compton, California
Duggygrrl BRONZE, Compton, California
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Favorite Quote:
Mirror, mirror, on the wall, who's the sanest one of all?


I feel like saying sorry,
But i don't know why
I feel like i betrayed you,
But you were never on my side
I feel like i broke your heart, but it was never mine
(P.S. I would be a good poet
If I knew how to rhyme.)
=]


The author's comments:
Being in love with two guys is hard...

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on Apr. 24 2017 at 3:27 pm
WolfWhisperer0911 BRONZE, Austin, Texas
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@Duggygrrl Dear I love your work. You did have the feelings in the poem beautiful! However, I like the poem even more if you could make it a little longer with the use of description language or use some love and creativity that could make the poem even better. Or listen to some music that is sad that can help you with the poem. Poetry isn't always rhyming, you could use syllables or the number of words to make your poem in good structure, or just do what you want to do with it, it's your creation. On the other hand, amazing job and hope you stay writing/typing!

Nicky said...
on Dec. 22 2008 at 8:49 pm
Nancy!!! This is a cool poem. u should make another one, but longer. lol. see ya later!

lil innocent said...
on Dec. 19 2008 at 9:39 pm
i put five stars peace, love