So you asked for some constructive criticism, so here you go :) The first line, great job using "dwell" instead of "living", it makes the poem more enticing. Second line, great job as well. Third line, writing "so grand and so great" does not flow too well, and takes away from the poem. Otherwise good. Fourth line, again does not flow too well. Maybe add punctuation marks. Fifth line, great job! It is clear and memorable. Sixth line, you need to capitalize the "i". Try switching earth and universe, because having "universe" then "earth" is a little choppy. Seventh line, I think you meant "populated" not popular. Eighth line, good job. Ninth line, put quotes or italicize the "is this it" part, since it is something you are thinking. tenth line, capitalize "my". Overall, it has great imagery and I like how it starts off small and then gets bigger and bigger, then comes back to you. Great job!