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"FORGIVENESS"
July 23, 2011
we used to be so close and all happy together
we used to be sista,sista
lovin each other with no regrets but
wat happen to all that
mistakes had turn us around
we hav end up dead with no loving memories
im trynna get back on my feet
but
without you by my side
will never make it
i know,i know i do wrong
but
one more chance will make us a winner
you and i are the same loving person
you my own shadow and my own spirit
our love will never depart
cause
you are inside of me
in my heart and in my soul
cause
we live in each others heart
and
our heart will alwayz tied up with the love that we hav for each other
© Hannah D., Tahmoor, Australia
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Lauren_Faith996 SILVER said...
on Aug. 20 2011 at 8:53 am
It has some good intentions, but you need to find a focus. Get into your rhythm- it seems kind of... choppy? I guess that's the word. Grammaric errors confuse the reader and tear your focus away from the actuall meaning of the poem. You have room for improvement, but good meaning. I liked it. Keep working at it.
EyesofBlueFire GOLD said...
on Aug. 14 2011 at 12:29 pm
I like the meaning and the feeling behind the poem. A little constructive criticism though... Possibly a little more focus on the rhythm and the grammar, it would make it a little more understandable to your audience and greatly improve your writing. :) Keep up the good work.
ClaireEloise SILVER said...
on Aug. 12 2011 at 11:14 pm
i liked it
