Captivated | Teen Ink


July 8, 2009
By kaelyn GOLD, East Northport, New York
kaelyn GOLD, East Northport, New York
18 articles 95 photos 21 comments

You have captured me
With a stroke of your finger
The brush of your skin
Makes me linger
In this moment for a little longer
Short of breath
My heart beats stronger
From this fire
Coursing through my veins
I'll stay right here
Endure the pain
If it means that I'll be next to you
For one more instant
I would go through
Hell if time would only stop
I'll halt the sun
Break all the clocks
So we could stay
Unburdened, untouched
Cradled in that first light of day
Never leaving this home we've discovered
Wrapped in love
Beside one another

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on May. 1 2010 at 8:57 pm
BleedingRose PLATINUM, Frederic, Wisconsin
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Very deep and very incredible!  Totally awesome sauce!  Very good descriptions and capturing of feelings.   I <3 it!


on Apr. 26 2010 at 9:36 pm
xBaByGiRrL22x PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"The goal isn't to live forever, but create something that will."
"If you wanna go, baby let's go; if you wanna rock, I'm ready to roll.''
"No one ever said it'd be easy. They just said it'd be worth it." <3

whoa. this is amazingg. its so deep. i luvv the descriptions! i completely agree, u r really very talented

on Feb. 1 2010 at 5:18 pm
sasssgirrrl22 PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Giving up is not a part of my vocabulary."
"Don't let the fear of striking out keep you from playing the game."
"Truth be told I miss ya, truth be told I'm lying."

luvv it. poetry definetly is a strong point 4 u. ur really talented

on Jul. 13 2009 at 2:31 am
despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
79 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The heart has its reasons which reason does not know." -Pascal, Pensees, 1670

Beautiful, I love it, and I plan to check out more of your work. I'd love it if you would read some of mine and I'd love to read your comments! Thanks so much! Again, your poem is phenomenal.

cree8ive GOLD said...
on Jul. 13 2009 at 1:19 am
cree8ive GOLD, Billings, Montana
16 articles 1 photo 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure." Mariane Williamson

nice poem, i like it. you should maybe consider not capitalizing the beginning of each line. not that it's wrong the way it is, but just something to consider. would you mind reading some of my work? i'd appreciate the criticism!