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A Kiss in the Rain

August 28, 2010
By Silence-Is-My-Virtue GOLD, Stansbury Park, Utah
Silence-Is-My-Virtue GOLD, Stansbury Park, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;The sentence below this is false.<br /> The sentence above this is true.<br /> Try to figure that out.&quot; -- unknown


She sees him standing there…waiting…
He has been watching her intently for a long time now, and it has started to bring forth sweet feelings the girl had no idea she was capable of.
She goes through all of her classes and sees him there, close to her—gazing at her when he thinks she isn’t looking.
Love surges forward in her heart.
She sees him on her way to her locker and when she leaves the school into the warm summer day and the love burns brighter.
She sits on a bench with her binder in front of her, hoping not to be too long because the weather changes sporadically.
He doesn’t know.
He doesn’t know that she dreams of the day she will get the special first kiss, the love she feels toward this boy... it is deeper than anything she has ever felt before.
Maybe it would be a magical moment in the rain…
She lets her thoughts trail off and doesn’t notice when her pencil moves across the blank paper in front of her, spelling out her deepest wishes.
She doesn’t notice when the boy watches every word she writes down.
The next day, she doesn’t see him waiting.
She doesn’t see him while she goes through all of her classes, gazing at her the way he did before.
She doesn’t see him on her way to her locker or when she leaves the school to go home as the dark clouds start to appear. Halfway home, the drizzling of raindrops begins and as if some part of her were jealous of the rain, the tears begin to fall. They slide silently down her cheeks.
When she enters her house, she goes straight upstairs, sobbing deeply into her pillow at the heavy feeling in her heart. He had never missed a day with her, snowy or windy—rain or shine.
These thoughts just make her sorrow deepen.
As the rain patters gently onto her window pane, the steady rhythm calms her and she keeps track of it to keep from crying again.
An abrupt change in the rhythm startles her.
There is a loud clattering against her window that is completely out of place and she stands, moving toward her window to peer below.
He is standing there, pebbles in hand, with a gorgeous smile upon his face as he beckons her outside. She nods and in but a tee shirt and jeans, she runs out the front door.
When she gets outside, the raindrops blur her vision along with the familiar sting of warm tears. Before she can get a word out, he pulls her to him and kisses her, long and passionate.
As they pull back, foreheads touching, he whispers the three words she has longed to her entire life.
“I love you.”
She manages to tell him the same before he crushes her to him in another deliciously warm kiss and for once, her world is in order.


The author's comments:
it was just a very rough interpretation of a wish i have deep in my heart. I can't write it out very well at all, but this isn't so bad.

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Aidyl BRONZE said...
on Sep. 21 2010 at 7:04 pm
Aidyl BRONZE, Oshawa, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you want a friend be a friend.&quot;<br /> <br /> -Poster<br /> <br /> <br /> &quot;That&#039;s cool. Hey you know what&#039;s even cooler than triceratops? Every other dinosaur that ever existed!&quot;<br /> -Dwight Schrute The Office

 I liked this one a lot. It's so sweet and simple. :)

on Sep. 21 2010 at 6:26 pm
Silence-Is-My-Virtue GOLD, Stansbury Park, Utah
10 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The sentence below this is false.<br /> The sentence above this is true.<br /> Try to figure that out.&quot; -- unknown

That's exactly what i was thinking! the sweetest thing ever!

on Sep. 21 2010 at 4:12 pm
mudpuppy BRONZE, Orangeburg, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Life is like a box of cheese and flower petal sometimes it&#039;s soft and sweet, sometimes it just plain stinks. - M.J.

There's no more romantic than a sweet kiss in the rain!

on Sep. 7 2010 at 8:16 am
Silence-Is-My-Virtue GOLD, Stansbury Park, Utah
10 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The sentence below this is false.<br /> The sentence above this is true.<br /> Try to figure that out.&quot; -- unknown

thank you! :) ill try to get more stories on here

on Sep. 6 2010 at 8:23 pm
crunchyginger18 GOLD, Lawrence, Kansas
16 articles 5 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Life Imitates Art&quot; Lana Del Rey

OOOOHHHH! I loved this soooo much! keep writing!!

on Sep. 1 2010 at 5:37 pm
TaliaWolf SILVER, Albuquerque, New Mexico
8 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I mean this girl was beautiful, and I&#039;m from Miami where beautiful people go to spawn&quot;<br /> Alex Flinn

That was super cute. I'm glad you didn't name them it gives it a much more open feeling

on Sep. 1 2010 at 4:58 pm
Silence-Is-My-Virtue GOLD, Stansbury Park, Utah
10 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The sentence below this is false.<br /> The sentence above this is true.<br /> Try to figure that out.&quot; -- unknown

Thank you guys so much for the positive comments! :) i didn't think this was a very good story until i realized how much people liked it. By the way, i love to read and would actually like it if you referred me to some things of your own for me to read and comment on. i'd love to give feedback :)

on Aug. 31 2010 at 5:59 pm
shy-writer GOLD, Spotsylvania, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;We&#039;re young. We don&#039;t need, a boy to love, hold, kiss. We won&#039;t always be able to relax and be kids, but we&#039;ll always be able to love. So I&#039;m going to get out there and liven up this world, leave my mark, make a difference.&quot; -Anonymous

OMG! You are such a wonderful writer! I LOVE THE STORY! I can totally relate right now! Especially to the beginning! I love stories that I can relate to, and you totally nailed it! It's simple, but wonderful! Good job! :)

on Aug. 31 2010 at 5:14 pm
NeverCaredForKool-Aid GOLD, Elkridge, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
I don&#039;t believe in hell but I believe in my parent&#039;s couch-- Watsky

Yeah, I usually don't like romances but this wasn't bad.  I thought it was very original when you had her absent-mindedly write down her romantic muse.  I totally, love the weather jokes too.  This was great, so keep writing; you're good at it.

Can you comment and rate my story, "Encounter"?


on Aug. 31 2010 at 4:02 pm
queenofspades PLATINUM, Bennington, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
you know when your in love when you can&#039;t fall asleep at night because reality is finally better then your dreams~ Dr. Seuss

Me too!!

i <3 the simplicity and the weather refrences :)


Apollo26 said...
on Aug. 31 2010 at 12:00 pm
Apollo26, Abington, Massachusetts
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I LOVED it! Plain and simple, loved it!!