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Take my Heart and Break It

October 11, 2009
By jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."


Take my broken heart,
and rip it from my chest.
Steal away my soul,
and finally put me to rest.

I dreamt about you day and night,
and I wanted you to be mine.
You watched me in my hardest days,
and sometimes you watched me shine.

Every time I saw you,
my heart would skip a beat.
Every time you said my name,
I would spring out of my seat.

I loved you with my heart and soul.
I loved you year after year.
But something always kept us apart:
our confusion, our chances, our fear.

But now there is no hope for us,
we are doomed to be apart.
Maybe I won't feel the pain
if you completely break my heart.


The author's comments:
Most of the time relationships grow from the innocence of a best friend. This is my poem explaining how it feels to realize that. This is also to express the awful truth when you discover that you can never be together.

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Gooseman GOLD said...
on Aug. 26 2013 at 1:38 pm
Gooseman GOLD, Roxbury, Connecticut
16 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
A creative man is motivated by the desire to achieve, not by the desire to beat others.

Beautifuly written poem. 

on Aug. 7 2013 at 12:37 pm
Jay-Wolf PLATINUM, Cedar Hills, Utah
25 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The man who takes offense when offence is not intended is a fool
However the man who takes offence when it is intended is an even greater fool"
Ralph Waldo Emerson

You did great personaly i'm not old enough to date let alone BF/GF so i don't know quite what your talking about, I'm just a shadow. Quick thought shouldn't  sonnets be in Iambic Pentamater, its a pain but it's worth it. Again brillant emotion but make sure you keep the mechanics :)

on Jun. 27 2013 at 1:06 pm
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

im glad you enjoyed it!! thank you! (:

on Jun. 8 2013 at 10:41 pm
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
16 articles 0 photos 98 comments
WOW just wow. like honestly love this poem!

Harri SILVER said...
on May. 6 2013 at 5:25 pm
Harri SILVER, Auburn Hills, Michigan
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Wow...That is really well written.  I loved it.

LadyTrina2 said...
on May. 6 2013 at 11:38 am
I Truly LOVE & ADORE This Poem !!!!! It Decribes What I Feel !!! GREAT JOB !!!!!

on Apr. 15 2013 at 11:17 pm
EmanP727 SILVER, Montebello, California
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This poem is nicely written !! It expresses so much truth

warboy SILVER said...
on Apr. 12 2013 at 8:20 pm
warboy SILVER, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
7 articles 5 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
We can’t solve problems by using the same kind of thinking we used when we created them.

This poem gave me the best answer to the thoughts i was thinking about. Thank You ! :')

on Mar. 8 2013 at 7:12 pm
PrinceHansismyworld SILVER, New Bedford, Massachusetts
7 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
"a villain and a victim should never be the same person”

this is a great poem. I liked how  the ryhmes flowed. I'm a writer myself, so I know what's good. and this poem is amazing

Marylu_251 said...
on Feb. 15 2013 at 9:52 am
Marylu_251, Mobile, Alabama
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I love your poem! It has true meaning, I already have a relationship like this right now. :(

on Feb. 9 2013 at 1:24 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
72 articles 0 photos 860 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

I really loved this. The rhyming was perfectly and the rhythm was never skewed. Great job!

on Feb. 1 2013 at 12:14 pm
WritingLoverForever PLATINUM, Bowling Green, Ohio
32 articles 2 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's not about success; it's about significance.

No one can make you feel inferior without your consent.

Wow, this was very moving.  The feelings you describe are so real and honest.  "Maybe I won't feel the pain if you completely break my heart" hit me the hardest of all.  You write incredibly gripping poetry. Keep it up! :)

on Jan. 25 2013 at 1:36 pm
RyanM. PLATINUM, Klamath Falls, Oregon
30 articles 0 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Those who deny the darkness in their hearts, are the ones who fall deeper into it."

Amazing job it's so surreal because alot of go through something with another where the  other just doesn't see what we see so bravo I'm your fan for life

on Jan. 22 2013 at 12:47 am
shayKittyFlcoka GOLD, Blockingham, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't give my emtions to people who dont matter to me. you cant make me angry, happy, sad, or watever unless you count.

obviously this poem is very understandable n moving. youve gottan so many views and comments. this is how alot of ppl feelwen they just give up bcuz theyve been torn apart so many times. extremely touching!goodjob!

KhatzDoxa said...
on Jan. 9 2013 at 5:27 am
Wow, I love this!!!

Zoya_Khan GOLD said...
on Dec. 23 2012 at 3:20 am
Zoya_Khan GOLD, Gujranwala, Other
19 articles 0 photos 420 comments

Favorite Quote:
Where LOGIC ends, FAITH begins.
- Zoya Khan

Nice :) :) :)

on Dec. 13 2012 at 9:54 pm
Timmmaayyy BRONZE, Plaquemine, Louisiana
1 article 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
Yes I am a Christian, but I am not perfect.

Wow this was awesome I went through the same thing things will always get better man.

on Dec. 10 2012 at 9:53 am
Not once, But twice.

on Oct. 18 2012 at 5:02 pm
FallenDreamerGurl SILVER, Tokoroa, Other
5 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
The Quiet is better than the noise,
Just like peace is better than chaos.

Absolutly love it completely!!!! best ever in my book :)

Lovergirl GOLD said...
on Oct. 18 2012 at 12:04 pm
Lovergirl GOLD, Gretna, Virginia
12 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"don't jugde and ye won't be jugde" matthew 7:1
"If you don't know the trees you will get lost in the forest, but if you don't know the stories you will get lost in life' -Siderian Proverb

beautiful i love it