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No Better Than Me

November 29, 2012
By TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown


I don't lie
Never have, never will
I won't lie
When I tell you
What I'm going through, baby
It's kinda hard
To put it into words
But I guess your girl's
No better than me

But I had to let you know

Oh, baby, I'm not lying
We, we could be flying
Way past the others
Oh, flying
Make em look up at us
Oh, we could be
We could be flying

I don't try
To prove people wrong
I didn't try
When I wrote down this song, baby
I find it hard
To match all the pieces
But I guess your girl's
No better than me

But I had to let you know

Oh, baby, I'm not lying
We, we could be flying
Way above the others
Oh, flying
Make them call up to us
Oh, we could be
We could be flying

And I gotta let you know

Oh, baby, I'm not lying
We, we could be flying
Way above the others
Oh, flying
Make them call up to us
Oh, we could be
We could be flying

'Cause, baby I know you want something new
You can't be happy with the one with you

Oh, baby, I'm not lying
We, we could be flying
Way above the others
Oh, flying
Make them call up to us

Oh, we could be

We could be

Flying


The author's comments:
This is definitely not my best work. I'd greatly appreciate any advice or tips! (I know my stanzas aren't equal.) ... It's about a girl (me) wanting a guy who's already got a boyfriend.

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on Dec. 15 2012 at 10:57 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
72 articles 0 photos 860 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

Okay, thank you so much for the advice. I'll definitely take it under consideration.

Katie1234 GOLD said...
on Dec. 15 2012 at 2:47 pm
Katie1234 GOLD, Velva, North Dakota
10 articles 0 photos 77 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When life becomes more than you can stand; fall to your knees"
"To be normal is to be boring."
"You cannot make men good by law."
"Christians believe that Jesus Christ is the son of God because He said so."
"To be a Christian means to forgive the inexcusable, because God has forgiven the inexcusable in you."

I honestly don't mind the inequal stanzas. I generally don't read this type of poetry because it usually comes off as needy, but you avoided that well. I didn't get the attention-seeker vibe, and I always appreciate a piece that avoids that.  I love how used flying to invoke a mental image. I could see pain behind every word. If there was anything I could change, I would reword the line "What I'm going through, baby." It doesn't flow as well as the rest of the piece does.  I think you were too hard on yourself. This is a good piece. Keep 'em coming!

on Dec. 7 2012 at 7:14 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
72 articles 0 photos 860 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

Gah! On my little author notes thing, I meant "girlfriend". Gosh, I can't even type right.