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(Long Free Verse)

October 16, 2018
By godhatesjasper121516 BRONZE, Hamburg, New York
godhatesjasper121516 BRONZE, Hamburg, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"It's not about how much you get, it's about how much you give." ~(some chinese short film on youtube)


What a monster 

you are, kid.

 

You stabbed me

in the back, 

twisted the kife.

 

I just watched

as my crimson

love grew over

the linoleum floor.

 

I lifted my 

gaze to your

soft splattered hands

as if you

snatched a galaxy--

 

Stole it from 

my star-struck

expression as if

you were god

and I a 

flower just waiting.

 

A single rose

waiting to be 

picked from the

millions of tattered,

stepped on beauties,

patiently awaiting your

gentle, loving grip,

 

to lift them

away from this 

burning hell of

a world and

carry them to

your precious castle

of hope, dreams,

and a future.

 

Oh but hey,

 

What a monster 

you are, kid.


The author's comments:

  I dont like to add words to my poems or art because I like to leave it up for interpretation. If you dont want to read a decent sized paragraph of how i came about the details for this poem, then please skip to the bottom for one more... food for thought, I guess :). This is the only peotic piece I'm proud enough of to put out there, and is the only one that I like to explain. 

  I originally wrote this because I was bored and I thought of what I thought was a good title. Before I start writing I usually think of how I want to present it. In this I knew I wanted to have it start with 2 lines/stanza and work up. The first stanza has 2 lines, then 3 lines, then 4, 5, 6, 7, and 8 lines, then goes to 1 then 2 lines again. After sitting and thinking, I decided to write about the person I love most in this world...my ex. I first described how they hurt me and slowly changed my opinion and compared them to a god, or a product of what a god would make, being a flower(because they influenced a lot of my life-changing decisions :/). Then I wanted to compare myself to the other people in this persons life (partners after me or other people who like them) by including myself (a single rose) waiting just like the others. I made sure to use the words "tattered, stepped on" to described how many of the people attracted to them were hurt by them or past relationships(including me). I dont know about other people, but when I texted or Facetimed this person, the rest of the world didnt exist and I was in what I described as a "precious castle" and followed that with specifically the word "future" because thats all I wanted all along(a future with them). And to conclude this depressing description, I ended with a self relization moment by saying "oh but hey," and repeating the original thought.

  I would like to mention that this poem was typed and "published" in my schools poetry book we made in a club and is plain black lettering on a blank white background because I stress the importance of not including pictures with certain poems, especially if you want people to have their own perception/thoughts... in other words I don't want people to get the story just by looking at a picture, I would like readers to visualize the meaning on their own. :) 

 

 

Submitted - 10/16/2018; 10:20pm


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