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Thick Black Fog

December 12, 2012
By Mr.Poetman PLATINUM, Union City, Indiana
Mr.Poetman PLATINUM, Union City, Indiana
28 articles 2 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
“You miss 100 percent of the shots you never take.” -Wayne Gretzy

I’m trapped
Stuck in this horrible place
The walls slowly caving in, I need some space
They threaten to crush me
To end my very existence
I can feel the darkness creeping in
Ready to engulf me whole
Ready to end me and take my soul
The life in which my mother gave
Is now being slowly drained

The darkness has now overtaken me
But there’s nothing I can do
I can’t even see
No matter how hard I try
I can’t escape this empty abyss
My only goal in life is to have
Just a little bliss
No matter how small
I little is better than none at all
I can’t seem to smile anymore
And I forgot how to laugh
My life was once whole
But now it’s only half
Locked up, Trapped, caged away
In my mind is where these terrible games are played
I can’t forfeit or even get a time out
I’m the withered corn dead from the drought
No more life within
Completely crushed, nowhere to begin
The blackness IS me
It’s in MY soul
It once again makes me whole
I am the epitome of depression
But the darkness fuels my aggression
Embracing the night
Makes everything alright
Helps all problems fade
Everything turns gray
These walls cease to collapse
Allowing me to breathe

The author's comments:
The frequent depression that i go through has helped inspire this poem. My goal was to create a powerful depression poem that anyone could relate to no matter what there situation is.

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on Mar. 15 2013 at 7:49 pm
Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Are you ready to go to battle with your mind?- Written by me :)
Lost the battle, win the war//Bringing my sinking ship back to the shore- Paramore, Now

I love it. And i love how you made it so that if anyone were to read it that they would be able to relate to it. My favorite line was... all of them, i can't choose!

on Jan. 11 2013 at 10:55 am
LyricLove SILVER, Webster City, Iowa
6 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't tell me the skies the limit when there are foot prints on the moon."

Yet again i have one word for you.....SPEECHLESS :)

on Jan. 9 2013 at 1:23 pm
huntinforwords, Slough, Utah
0 articles 1 photo 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
'If we're all chasing eachothers tails , who wins?'

Well done poet you have reached the SICK LEVEL!!!!! UR JUST AS SICK AS SICKSPEEEEEEEEEEEED!!

on Jan. 7 2013 at 12:24 pm
Hamzawaseem GOLD, Lahore, Other
15 articles 1 photo 144 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The important thing is not to stop questioning." ~Einstein

You have achieved the target to write a depressing poem. good!

on Dec. 23 2012 at 10:54 am
country-cutey GOLD, St.croix Falls, Wisconsin
10 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dont say it if you dont mean it because i might actually belive it

it was amazing :) ur a great writer

Zoya_Khan GOLD said...
on Dec. 21 2012 at 8:06 am
Zoya_Khan GOLD, Gujranwala, Other
19 articles 0 photos 420 comments

Favorite Quote:
Where LOGIC ends, FAITH begins.
- Zoya Khan

Love It <3 <3 <3

on Dec. 19 2012 at 5:34 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

WOW simply incredible and moving. I have goosebumps

on Dec. 17 2012 at 9:52 am
AmieeHope-Sierra GOLD, Royston, Georgia
11 articles 0 photos 115 comments

Favorite Quote:
And There Will Come A Time, You'll See, With No More Tears. And Love Will Not Break Your Heart, But Dismiss Your Fears.

I loved it. Again your description is spectacular. :) You really took the reader to that place that you felt was engulfing you and taking your soul. It was as if you were reaching out to the reader and explaining how you felt. It was done nicely. :)