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Weeping Willows Sway

July 29, 2014
By Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
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"To these the past hath its phantoms,<br /> More real than solid earth;<br /> And to these death does not mean decay,<br /> But only another birth" <br /> - Isabella Banks

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Weeping willows sway
in time to the lazy song
of sweet summer time

© Jaideep R., Bangalore, India

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Olivia-Atlet ELITE said...
on Oct. 1 2014 at 10:51 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
325 articles 10 photos 1165 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,<br /> More real than solid earth;<br /> And to these death does not mean decay,<br /> But only another birth" <br /> - Isabella Banks

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Thanks! I actually did start giving them new titles, one of my newest ones is called "On the Streets," and I tried to make sure it wasn't too close to the poem ^_^ I appreciate your feedback, it helps me grow :)
bruisedmemories ELITE said...
on Sep. 27 2014 at 12:27 pm
bruisedmemories ELITE, Birdsboro, Pennsylvania
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&quot;When you&#039;re young, you can fly, but we trip on clouds &#039;cause we get too high&quot; -The Band Perry (Song: Don&#039;t Let Me Be Lonely)<br /> &quot;Cause no matter what, you&#039;ll never be alone&quot; -Lady Antebellum (Song: Compass)

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I agree with @MalaikaJ. If you changed the title of your haikus, it may add more meaning and uniqeness to them. That's just my personal opinion. Other than that, all of them are amazing. I especially love this one! Voted 5/5!
Olivia-Atlet ELITE said...
on Sep. 15 2014 at 8:27 am
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
325 articles 10 photos 1165 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,<br /> More real than solid earth;<br /> And to these death does not mean decay,<br /> But only another birth" <br /> - Isabella Banks

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Thanks! :) I'll follow your advice the next time I write one ^_^
MalaikaJ GOLD said...
on Sep. 13 2014 at 3:53 pm
MalaikaJ GOLD, Cloquet, Minnesota
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I love writing. I love the swirl and swing of words as they tangle with human emotions. - James Michener

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I like that many of your haikus describe simple things. One piece of advice, haikus are short and it's hard to get a lot of meaning across in them. You might want to write titles that add to the haiku rather than repeat the first line. Just a thought. I like them, though!