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December 27, 2012
By EatWriteSleep PLATINUM, Orlando, Florida
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We are all in the gutter but some of us are looking at the stars- Oscar Wilde

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Hope is a blinding
ray of sunshine that comes from
deep inside your heart

© Ashley D., Philadelphia, PA

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WolfWhisperer0911 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 11 2017 at 8:08 pm
WolfWhisperer0911 BRONZE, Austin, Texas
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@EatWriteSleep I suggest you talk to Hanban12. She does an awesome job on her suggestions. :D Also here are some advice I would say: 1. Good job on the topic which I loved the idea of hope as a candle (Spoiler: my haiku is actually about hope, like yours!) 2. I find it really hard when I read the first line when the word "ray" is split from the words "of sunshine". What I suggest is to say, "Line 1: Hope is starlight" maybe???? Also change the picture from candles to stars, if you want to. 3. Overall, good job and don't stop typing/writing.
YasminB. PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 16 2013 at 9:12 am
YasminB. PLATINUM, Ocala, Florida
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Wonderful poem.  I really caught my attention!!!
JRaye PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 15 2013 at 10:16 am
JRaye PLATINUM, Dorr, Michigan
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&quot;If you build your house far enough away from Trouble, then Trouble will never find you.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Have you ever looked fear in the face and said, &#039;I just don&#039;t care.&#039;?&quot;

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You're very welcome! :) I feel like I should've put a little more, so here I am - I feel the exact same way and love the way you put it into this poem. Awesome job! You totally earned the publication!
EatWriteSleep PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 15 2013 at 8:21 am
EatWriteSleep PLATINUM, Orlando, Florida
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We are all in the gutter but some of us are looking at the stars- Oscar Wilde

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This made my day; thank you!! 
JRaye PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 14 2013 at 10:04 am
JRaye PLATINUM, Dorr, Michigan
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&quot;If you build your house far enough away from Trouble, then Trouble will never find you.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Have you ever looked fear in the face and said, &#039;I just don&#039;t care.&#039;?&quot;

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Absolutely amazing
EatWriteSleep PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 13 2013 at 8:31 pm
EatWriteSleep PLATINUM, Orlando, Florida
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Thanks a bunch! :)
azacious SILVER said...
on Nov. 13 2013 at 2:12 pm
azacious SILVER, Keedysville, Maryland
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I really like the simplicity of this poem. It makes it all the more powerful. Excellent job!
EatWriteSleep PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 12 2013 at 9:29 pm
EatWriteSleep PLATINUM, Orlando, Florida
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We are all in the gutter but some of us are looking at the stars- Oscar Wilde

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Thank you!! :)
C.Tessa SILVER said...
on Nov. 12 2013 at 2:27 pm
C.Tessa SILVER, Los Angeles, California
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It's very true and you wrote it beautifully in only a few words.
411Ellie PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 10 2013 at 11:26 pm
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
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I agree with @MarieEsther. You have great talent! Don't be afraid to be a poetic pioneer! I know you have it in you!
EatWriteSleep PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 6 2013 at 10:16 pm
EatWriteSleep PLATINUM, Orlando, Florida
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We are all in the gutter but some of us are looking at the stars- Oscar Wilde

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oops that was supposed to be a reply to MarieEsther, not a new comment.
EatWriteSleep PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 6 2013 at 10:15 pm
EatWriteSleep PLATINUM, Orlando, Florida
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We are all in the gutter but some of us are looking at the stars- Oscar Wilde

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Thank you SO much for your feedback and yeah, I do wish this haiku was a bit better :) I really appreciate you reading some of my other stuff too!
MarieEsther PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 6 2013 at 6:16 pm
MarieEsther PLATINUM, Miami, Florida
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The structure of this poem is very good. It vaught my interest and I decided to read through one or two of your other works, and it's really obvious that you have a talent for rhyme and structure (: The only thing I would say is that the idea of this poem is a bit cliche. Comparing hope to sunshine from the heart is something that has been done a lot. Hope is a tricky subject to write about; maybe you could try comparing it to something original, I'm sure that would go beautifully with your sentimental and flowing voice.
EatWriteSleep PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 2 2013 at 9:37 am
EatWriteSleep PLATINUM, Orlando, Florida
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We are all in the gutter but some of us are looking at the stars- Oscar Wilde

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Thank you so much!! :)
411Ellie PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 31 2013 at 11:11 pm
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
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&quot;Paper is more patient than people.&quot; &ndash;Anne Frank

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This poem is so smooth and fluid. Wonderful job! Congrats on getting published! :)
EatWriteSleep PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 31 2012 at 3:07 pm
EatWriteSleep PLATINUM, Orlando, Florida
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We are all in the gutter but some of us are looking at the stars- Oscar Wilde

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Thank you! :)
stupendousman BRONZE said...
on Dec. 31 2012 at 12:57 pm
stupendousman BRONZE, Peoria, Arizona
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I think that was the most emotional and beautiful piece ever written with few words. And the most true. :)