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A Love Forsaken

December 13, 2011
By beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt


No one can ever
understand the pain I feel
from losing you so.

No one hears my screams
of anguish or sees my face
streaked with tears.

Alone I suffer in
silence, reliving the sting
of your betrayal.

I threw away all
of the letters you wrote--now
stained with deceit.

Confused I feel
in so many ways--how could
this have happened?

The red rose that once
was precious and beautiful,
lays withered, broken.



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on May. 26 2012 at 10:22 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

Really interesting comment--this poem is part of my earlier work, so I was a little hesitant in constructing a poem of this subject, a love gone wrong. But I see that the middle could've been longer. Actually, I thought the last stanza with the "withering rose" was trite and overdone, but I'm pleasantly surprised that u like it.

on May. 25 2012 at 2:11 pm
snowleopard100 PLATINUM, New York City, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, but I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."

The body of the poem, due to the amazing talents I've seen in your other work, could be more imaginative. A perfect example of this kind of striking imagery is at the end of this poem with the "withering rose"--a knock out line. I loved that part, truly great