Exhale | Teen Ink


October 22, 2010
By NeverCaredForKool-Aid GOLD, Elkridge, Maryland
NeverCaredForKool-Aid GOLD, Elkridge, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
I don't believe in hell but I believe in my parent's couch-- Watsky

A world bleak and worn
Sighs heavily before sleep
The wind in autumn

The author's comments:
Time for rest at last

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whatev said...
on Jul. 28 2011 at 10:35 am
whatev, Timbuk Tu, Other
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this piece very much provokes profound thoughts! Loved it! :D

whatev said...
on Jul. 28 2011 at 10:32 am
whatev, Timbuk Tu, Other
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what i got from this poem is that each season brings on different stances for the earth, the most obvious to me was that winter was the time for sleeping. So when the earth was preparing itself for slumber it sighed and created the autumn wind

on Jun. 8 2011 at 9:19 am
Alex_Durham GOLD, Vineland, New Jersey
14 articles 1 photo 234 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

I LOVED the first two lines. I'm actually imagining the earth exhaling and it's beautiful. Very creative! :)

on Nov. 15 2010 at 12:25 pm
TheGraeWolf GOLD, Pikeville, North Carolina
10 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Forget it and move forward, this is a New Era"

I think the first two lines are great, but the third leaves me hanging. You should add to this; three more lines like the first couple would make this wonderful.

AshTree SILVER said...
on Nov. 12 2010 at 5:57 pm
AshTree SILVER, Clarksville, Tennessee
7 articles 0 photos 196 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Live your art" -made this one up myself. Simple, but true.

I like how you use personification. Haikus are some of my favorite poetry because they are short yet powerful if written correctly.

on Nov. 10 2010 at 6:56 pm
Healing_Angel SILVER, Sydney, Other
8 articles 2 photos 509 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live for today, not for tomorrow

This is good. Short and sweet. Good job. You should continue this! The last line seems odd and doesn't really fit.

on Nov. 10 2010 at 10:44 am
Phoenix97 PLATINUM, Minneapolis, Minnesota
29 articles 4 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
See lyrics to "Let the Waters Rise" by MIKESCHAIR and "Everything" by Lifehouse

First off, beautiful imagery. :) "Bleak" is a descriptive and sadly underused word. I love the first two lines, but the third is just okay. I guess I feel like it doesn't live up to the other two.

on Nov. 5 2010 at 12:49 pm
pieluver BRONZE, Blountsville, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
"The silence isn't so bad till I look at my hand and feel sad cause the spaces between my fingers are were urs fit perfectly."

i absolutely love this masterpiece..... it mans so much right now...im glad ive read it....keep writing