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Persistent Rose

October 6, 2010
By NeverCaredForKool-Aid GOLD, Elkridge, Maryland
NeverCaredForKool-Aid GOLD, Elkridge, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
I don't believe in hell but I believe in my parent's couch-- Watsky

Overgrown rosebush
Reaches aspiring limbs
Out towards its dreams

Thorns misunderstood
Cut away from ambition
Severed branches bleed

Fallen arms reborn
More ambitious than before
Resilient bush

The author's comments:
We grow back stronger

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on Jun. 8 2011 at 9:19 am
Alex_Durham GOLD, Vineland, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

Wow. This is amazing. 

AshTree SILVER said...
on Nov. 12 2010 at 6:08 pm
AshTree SILVER, Clarksville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"Live your art" -made this one up myself. Simple, but true.

I'm in love with this! I read your comment afterwards and I understood why you put cut away from ambition severed branches bleed. It is really a beautiful thought that after our dreams have been curtailed like a rose's thorns cut off, we grow back stronger and tougher than ever

on Nov. 10 2010 at 12:37 pm
Phoenix97 PLATINUM, Minneapolis, Minnesota
29 articles 4 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
See lyrics to "Let the Waters Rise" by MIKESCHAIR and "Everything" by Lifehouse

The first stanza is good, and the third is good, but the second is my favorite by far. I love the way you worded the first two lines of the second stanza. I think that this stanza has the most striking imagery, although the entire thing is gorgeous. Kudos, by the way on managing to make this fit in haiku form. My haiku wander considerably in the syllable count trying to be descriptive, so I am quite impressed with this poem. :)

on Nov. 2 2010 at 7:00 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 658 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

I like how you said "fallen arms reborn" in the last line. I can NOT write haikus like at all, so this is pretty awesome to me. C: I think it flows really well.

on Oct. 23 2010 at 8:37 pm
amandap PLATINUM, Midlothian, Virginia
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i love this! the whole choppy feel of the poem (I'm guessing it's a haiku, because of the comment below mine?) Haiku's are so hard, it takes a lot of work and talent to be able to convey a message while still staying within the rules of the haiku! kudos to you!

on Oct. 20 2010 at 12:42 pm
elfen_girl BRONZE, Wilmslow, Other
3 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
K.I.S.S - Keep it simple stupid

wow that was amazing

i love haikus. u really managed to describe the subject really well and with the right siliballs.

(love the comment also)