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The Growth That Will Never Be Planted

October 4, 2015
By Temperance SILVER, Austin, Texas
Temperance SILVER, Austin, Texas
5 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The facts of this world seen clearly, are those seen through tears." -Margaret Atwood


The hurt, the pain,
The saddening birthright I plan to own,
Will live on my shoulders and
Leap, leap
Onto others and others.

Harsh metal of a gun
Will not ever touch my head,
For all the work I’ve done
Will be
Erased
And replaced,
With the image of two genres,
Horror and gore.
Ugly is not how I
Wish to be remembered.

Cold metal of a gun
Will not ever touch my chin,
My soft chin that holds many strengths,
And secrets;
For the terror in tears,
And the shock of a thousand stabs
Will resin
In the pit of mother’s eyes, and heart.
And-

Suffer will grow,
Strong and surviving onto
Others and others of coworkers and mothers,
Who’s weak minds and hearts
Will allow of the expansion, though
Their wishes may be hiding under covers.
 



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on Oct. 30 2015 at 4:18 pm
WinterRose76 SILVER, Ok., Florida
6 articles 6 photos 183 comments

Favorite Quote:
Arise and be all that you dream - Flyleaf

Beautiful piece - the imagery is excellent and your word choice is impeccable. I really loved the line "and the shock of a thousand stabs". Keep writing!

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on Oct. 22 2015 at 11:16 am
J3w3L GOLD, Bonners Ferry, Idaho
15 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Beauty isn't about having a pretty face. It's about having a pretty mind, pretty heart, and pretty soul."

This is beautiful! I love the word choice, and I feel like there are many others who feel like this! This is a perfect example of how people are today. Please keep writing!

on Oct. 13 2015 at 7:56 am
writer-violist DIAMOND, Jenks, Oklahoma
63 articles 4 photos 84 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;There is no greater agony than bearing an untold story inside you.&rdquo; <br /> ― Maya Angelou, I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings

I like the meter in the poem. It stays constant throughout the piece. I also like how you put a capital letter in the beginning of each line because it looks uniform. I suggest that you watch using the word "and" on the line: "In the pit of the mother's eyes, and heart. And-" unless that is the way it is supposed to be in the poem. I also suggest that you put "and heart" on the next line. unless that is the way it is supposed to be in the poem. I like the imagery in this piece. Especially the line: "Their wishes may be hiding under covers." Great, Great job. I would like to see more; keep writing! :)