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A Silent Farewell

June 2, 2015
By HayatC. PLATINUM, Louisville, Kentucky
HayatC. PLATINUM, Louisville, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"Do not pray for an easy life, pray for the strength to endure a difficult one."


The goodbye letter I wrote for you
Will forever remain buried in my heart,
Its grave bedecked with dead roses.
Its contents unread, unfelt, but never forgotten,
Lie mournfully in the forlorn cemetery of Back Then.
Its tombstone, a mosaic of every seemingly meaningless;
Yet, meaningful moment we’ve ever shared.



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on Jun. 21 2015 at 3:24 pm
Blackjack. GOLD, Suffolk, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Take a lesson from "the Greatest Man That Ever Lived," Austin Aries. The ambition and vision of one depends on how bad@ss they look in sunglasses." - Me, 2017

"Who is this Jose, and why is he always being denied?" - Corey Graves, 2016

No problem

on Jun. 21 2015 at 3:22 pm
HayatC. PLATINUM, Louisville, Kentucky
25 articles 0 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not pray for an easy life, pray for the strength to endure a difficult one."

It's free verse so I didn't concern myself with making it rhyme, but thanks for the feedback nonetheless!

on Jun. 21 2015 at 3:19 pm
Blackjack. GOLD, Suffolk, Virginia
13 articles 0 photos 94 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Take a lesson from "the Greatest Man That Ever Lived," Austin Aries. The ambition and vision of one depends on how bad@ss they look in sunglasses." - Me, 2017

"Who is this Jose, and why is he always being denied?" - Corey Graves, 2016

Pretty good, but the one thing that can be fixed is the sentence "Its contents unread, unfelt, but never forgotten" Perhaps you could make it from "but never forgotten" to "but I never forgot" so it sounds more similar to "Heart" abit. Just a thought.