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Ocean MAG

July 18, 2014
By BriannaRifkin PLATINUM, Columbia, Maryland
BriannaRifkin PLATINUM, Columbia, Maryland
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the depths will swallow you up
with no compunction
they'll drag you down
they'll grab your ankles
and pull you
down past the schools of red,
blue and yellow
down past the coral
down past
the farthest layer
light can reach
until you lie there
pale-faced
pruned skin
like the ripples and waves have found home
in your fingers and toes

hair swaying up and down
side to side
upon the pebbled sand of
creatures –
of fragmented ships
and sunken bottles –
alone in the abyss
somewhere
and just to your right
is a violent drop-off

and with a nudge of the tide
you start descending

drifting

down once more.



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on Sep. 17 2014 at 8:38 pm
BriannaRifkin PLATINUM, Columbia, Maryland
27 articles 0 photos 12 comments
Thank you!!!

on Sep. 17 2014 at 7:04 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Congrats on having this published! ^_^ You deserve it. I love your poem for it is absolutely amazing. You have such a talent and greatness in you. Never give up. For you are a wonderful person and writer. Thank you for sharing this!

on Jul. 22 2014 at 5:51 pm
BriannaRifkin PLATINUM, Columbia, Maryland
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That's very nice! Thank you so much!

on Jul. 22 2014 at 5:47 pm
TheComet PLATINUM, Mostaganem, Other
22 articles 1 photo 439 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Speak when you are angry and you will make the best speech you will ever regret&quot; -Ambrose Bierce<br /> &quot; Be yourself! Everybody else is already taken ;)&quot;<br /> &quot;Don&#039;t go where the path leads you. Go instead where there&#039;s no path and leave a trail ;)&quot;-R.W.Emerson

I don't how you do to find so perfect words for kind of a complicated subject !!! I guess it's a gift! Yup you are truly gifted to write such poetic work and really be great in it. Just an other masterpiece from you Keep on writing ^_^

on Jul. 22 2014 at 4:40 pm
CreativeFreakkk DIAMOND, Spencer, Iowa
53 articles 40 photos 204 comments

Favorite Quote:
Stand up for what you believe in even if it means standing alone. -Andy Biersack<br /> Sometimes you gotta fall before you can fly. -Kellin Quinn<br /> You made me hate my own reflection. -Sleeping With Sirens

This was amazing! You deserved the EC!

on Jul. 21 2014 at 11:43 pm
booklover303 SILVER, Morgan Hill,
8 articles 5 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;School days are the unhappiest in the whole span of human existence. They are full of dull, unintelligible tasks, new and unpleasant ordinances, with brutal violations of common sense and common decency.&quot; -Henry Louis Mencken

this was really good! Keep it up :)

on Jul. 21 2014 at 11:34 pm
BriannaRifkin PLATINUM, Columbia, Maryland
27 articles 0 photos 12 comments
Thank you so much!

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on Jul. 21 2014 at 10:05 pm
Lildre SILVER, Leesburg, Georgia
5 articles 3 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Love makes us liars&quot; ~cassandra Clare<br /> &quot;All the stories are true&quot; ~Hodge

WOW that was truly amazing. you really have great control over the language