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A Letter

April 1, 2014
By j.g.poems PLATINUM, Naples, Florida
j.g.poems PLATINUM, Naples, Florida
29 articles 6 photos 43 comments

I crave to open my mailbox,

After walking a mile home,

And instead of seeing a hollow darkness,

A single letter is placed gently,

Awaiting for my eyes,

To reveal the secrets you have confessed to me.

And as I read my name,

Written in your sloppy writing,

And tear the opening,

My fingers are anxious to feel the paper you have just felt,

Three days ago.

I unfold the neatly folded paper,

And a scent hits my tiny nose.

"You" I whisper,

Intoxicated by your once familiar aroma.

As my hazel eyes skim down the paper,

They see micorscopic water marks,

Tatooing a trail of tears.

And in that moment,

After I finish reading your words,

I find fresh, small, salty marks,

Dancing with your own.

I finally begin to realize,

You miss me as dearly as I do.

You crave me as dearly as I do.

And you love me as dearly as I do.

-Jessica Lynn Garby



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on May. 16 2014 at 8:13 pm
lostloveXalexisX GOLD, Neosho, Missouri
16 articles 8 photos 20 comments
this is really good and thanks for checking out my work and commenting on it

KaavyaM SILVER said...
on Apr. 17 2014 at 5:50 am
KaavyaM SILVER, Hyderabad, Other
9 articles 1 photo 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
To live is the rarest thing in the world. Most people exist, that is all.

This is beautiful. "I find fresh, small, salty marks/ Dancing with your own." This poem is fresh, sad, sweet, wistful and joyful all at once. Keep writing, and you'll go far.

on Apr. 13 2014 at 11:17 am
j.g.poems PLATINUM, Naples, Florida
29 articles 6 photos 43 comments
Wow, thank you so much. That was one of the nicest comments I have ever recieved!

JRaye PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 12 2014 at 8:25 pm
JRaye PLATINUM, Dorr, Michigan
43 articles 10 photos 523 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you build your house far enough away from Trouble, then Trouble will never find you.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Have you ever looked fear in the face and said, &#039;I just don&#039;t care.&#039;?&quot;

You know what I love? When you take something simple (a letter in a mailbox) and turn it into something poetically beautiful, maybe even turn it into a story in itself (a long distance relationship I'm thinking?) This is truly beautiful :) Also, it would flow a lot nicer if you changed your formatting a bit, compact it as Nobuo mentioned. Other than that, oustandingly awesome! :D

Nobuo GOLD said...
on Apr. 12 2014 at 4:38 pm
Nobuo GOLD, Dio, Missouri
16 articles 1 photo 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
Hello

Viewtiful, but try compacting it a little bit 

on Apr. 12 2014 at 2:34 pm
j.g.poems PLATINUM, Naples, Florida
29 articles 6 photos 43 comments
thank you!!

on Apr. 12 2014 at 2:33 pm
j.g.poems PLATINUM, Naples, Florida
29 articles 6 photos 43 comments
thanks so so so much!

on Apr. 12 2014 at 1:57 pm
SunnyDreams BRONZE, Niger Falls, Other
1 article 0 photos 274 comments

Favorite Quote:
Can you feel what I have seen, when no one else has lived through what I have?-HalveOfLife

AMAZING!! I LOVE THIS POEM!! I COULD NEVER FUCUS ON JUST ONE LETTER o-o

on Apr. 12 2014 at 1:50 pm
SlowEternity BRONZE, Big Lake, Minnesota
4 articles 15 photos 79 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love is like a wildfire; It knows no boundaries.- Em

I love it!t!

on Apr. 12 2014 at 9:18 am
Ray--yo PLATINUM, Kathmandu, Other
43 articles 2 photos 581 comments

Favorite Quote:
God Makes No Mistakes. (Gaga?)<br /> &quot;I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right.&quot; -Liesel Meminger via Markus Zusac, &quot;The Book Thief&quot;

I really like some of the structures used, however, I'd prefer the description to be more subtly put. (while you have no obligation to please me, but i had to be honest) Really good work!

on Apr. 12 2014 at 9:12 am
j.g.poems PLATINUM, Naples, Florida
29 articles 6 photos 43 comments
Thanks so much! 

AGDDavy SILVER said...
on Apr. 12 2014 at 9:10 am
AGDDavy SILVER, Tamarac, Florida
9 articles 9 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you believe that your dream already came true, it is easier to achieve it and harder not to make it happen.&quot;<br /> -A.G.D. (Me)

It's very simple, succinct and definitely has a voice! (P.S. "Awaiting for my eyes" should be "Awaiting my eyes" or "Awaiting my attention")

on Apr. 12 2014 at 9:08 am
Roy.M.Hunter GOLD, Lamar, South Carolina
18 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;sticks &amp; stones may break my bones, but words can&#039;t hurt me.&quot;

loved it.