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lullaby

February 1, 2014
By Eno_Bladez GOLD, Williamsport, Pennsylvania
Eno_Bladez GOLD, Williamsport, Pennsylvania
16 articles 1 photo 81 comments

Favorite Quote:
it'll be okay, if it's not okay it's not over.


Honey, come here.
That’s right, come here.
I wont hurt you honey.
I just want to help,
Tell me, what’s wrong?
Who made you cry?
Shush honey, don’t worry.
Come, shut your eyes.
Everything will be okay.
Everything will be just fine.
Come and listen to my lullaby.



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-Yin- SILVER said...
on Feb. 6 2014 at 8:28 pm
-Yin- SILVER, Falls Church, Virginia
8 articles 5 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
life goes on, with you or without you.

the title brings it to a full circle so i disagree

on Feb. 6 2014 at 5:45 pm
itskatomall PLATINUM, Orlando, Florida
32 articles 12 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"How lucky I am to have something that makes saying goodbye so hard." - Winnie the Pooh

I enjoyed this short piece. My favorite line was the last line bcause it rhymed with one of the previous lines and brought everything together. However, I would like to say that it wasn't quite clear to me if this was a mother consoling a daughter, or a boyfriend consoling a girlfriend, or anything of that sort. I wish that the poem told more of a story. Also, the title of the poem is lullaby, but a lullaby is only mentioned once. In my opinion, if you are going to title the poem "Lullaby", you should make it more about the lullaby than the girl/guy being upset. But other than that, it was good for a short piece. Well done.

on Feb. 6 2014 at 1:01 pm
EpilepticUnicorn BRONZE, Donaldson, Arkansas
1 article 0 photos 2 comments
Well written peice! Excellent job

briandbubbz said...
on Feb. 6 2014 at 9:03 am
u can cry on me