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Peaches and Time

August 1, 2013
By Labradorian PLATINUM, Chicago, Illinois
Labradorian PLATINUM, Chicago, Illinois
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Time curls like ripened peach skin
Pulled from the flesh.
Which falls from my hands
Before I can think to catch it.
But the peach tree out front
Is ripe now
And freckled with nucleus, cytoplasm,
Membrane tickled with baby fuzz.

The premature fruits
Lay smooth and hard, around the base
As my brother took joy in
Picking the green globes
That would thunk upon the dirt
And roll to his feet in adulation.

This is satisfying somehow,
Our control on the cells of the world.
But time contains no nucleus
No cytoplasm or membrane,
And it falls from my hands
Before I can think to catch it.

The author's comments:
Schools starting in a few weeks. I don't really want it to. Can you tell?

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on Sep. 6 2013 at 1:28 am
TheSkyOwesMeRain GOLD, Irvine, California
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Favorite Quote:
Life isn't measured by the number of breaths you take, but by the moments which take your breath away.

You are only as strong as your weakest link.

This is a great poem, I really enjoyed reading it. I wish school wouldn't start :( 

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on Aug. 5 2013 at 6:51 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Very original and witty similes. You're really talented. And I don't like school that much either. So I could feel your pain. Very descriptive. 

on Aug. 1 2013 at 8:37 pm
Labradorian PLATINUM, Chicago, Illinois
34 articles 0 photos 52 comments
Thank you for your comment and suggestions. I will definately take them into consideration.

on Aug. 1 2013 at 7:29 pm
MissExploration BRONZE, Vancouver, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
It Can Only Fly When It Needs To.

I never thought about connecting peaches and time together. Very creative. Your first and last stanza go well together, but the second stanza seems a bit random because you are not focusing on yourself anymore. From how I read it, I assumed that your poem was focusing on yourself.  On your last stanza when it says, "This is satisfying somehow" can you describe why it's satisfying? and be more specific. I like how you used simple biology terms in this poem.  Overall you pulled it off comparing time and peaches in this poem :)