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My View

May 18, 2013
By Kaylaa_Nicole_ SILVER, Smyrna, Tennessee
Kaylaa_Nicole_ SILVER, Smyrna, Tennessee
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You consume the majority of my Time.
Dreaming, thinking, longing, and being with you.
Love was given to us by God.
So why not spread it?
Why do others judge two young lovers?
Maybe we do not have much experience,
Maybe we won't be together forever,
But is forever real?
The world is everchanging, and only God is forever and pure.
Mistakes are humankind's heart.
It is what we do.
So let us make this mistake.
I want to jump into your arms and leave.
No worries, no looking back.
Fulfledged trust and compassion.
Let us be judged.
Maybe we are wrong, but if we are wrong together- maybe it will be right.
Does anyone truly have answers to life?
Research, labor, thinking- do we have hard facts or do we delete all creativity and room for question in an idea?
You love me, I love you.
But do we know each other- will we ever?
We believe we do, but maybe we don't.
Do you care?
If no one cares, then what is the purpose of life?
What is the purpose of anything?
If no one cared we would have world peace and omit all conflicts.
Maybe this is the solution.
Maybe not.
I will never understand.
But I do know that my heart beats with yours.
And that is all I want and need.
Even if this is just a dream or a phase in adolescence, it will be a romanticized memory.
A stone in which will let me step and rest for a while until I find a shinier, better rock that will transfer me safely to the next.
But until then, I will continue to "waste" or merely use my Time upon you my love.



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on May. 31 2013 at 9:58 pm
Kaylaa_Nicole_ SILVER, Smyrna, Tennessee
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Thank you :)

on May. 31 2013 at 9:57 pm
Kaylaa_Nicole_ SILVER, Smyrna, Tennessee
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I appreciate your critique. I agree it lacks structure. Thank you very much!

on May. 30 2013 at 10:24 pm
Sarah_Rose17 SILVER, Windsor, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"Remember to trust others, it will one day be your saving grace."

This poem is an interesting line of thought. While  I think that you could have more consistant meter, it's great. Keep it up!  

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on May. 30 2013 at 4:02 pm
This is really good! Though, I do not see a structure in the poem... I know it is free-style, but there's usually rhyme, or rythme; there are some halting points in this piece. But it was good nonetheless. Do not be discouraged; not everyone is perfect. What matters is what is more important to you, and if you are willing to spend time constructing your work. Thank you for writing this.

on May. 30 2013 at 11:24 am
Kaylaa_Nicole_ SILVER, Smyrna, Tennessee
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thank you:) it just floated out of me onto the page. awesome when that happens. thanks :)

Beatles SILVER said...
on May. 30 2013 at 10:47 am
Beatles SILVER, Chennai, Other
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Nice :) the meaning is simply beautiful. AAnd true ;)

on May. 26 2013 at 5:37 pm
Kaylaa_Nicole_ SILVER, Smyrna, Tennessee
6 articles 0 photos 28 comments
thank you very much! :)  

on May. 26 2013 at 5:24 pm
TanviKusum DIAMOND, Gurgaon, Other
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Favorite Quote:
All men who have achieved great things have been great dreamers. <br /> Orison Swett Marden<br /> <br /> &quot;The role of a writer is not to say what we all can say, but what we are unable to say.&quot; - Anais Nin<br /> <br /> we speak in hushed voices so as to not wake our memories

It;s so tough to pen down what you think and you have done it beautifully well. Good job, keep writing :)