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Elemental Love MAG

August 23, 2008
By Nicole Brooks SILVER, South Plainfield, New Jersey
Nicole Brooks SILVER, South Plainfield, New Jersey
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When I saw you
It was chemistry.
I knew then we were meant to be
In equilibrium,
Like sodium and chloride
(But not so tart).
You were my dioxide; and
Our glance was the start
Of a homogeneous reaction,
An explosive combustion
Of neon and helium.
And we’d be like an element,
Completely inseparable.
And when you laid that rock-hard
Hunk of flawless,
Hexoctahedral carbon
Onto my finger,
I knew we would forever
Have triple bonds
To tie together our heartstrings.

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This article has 42 comments.

on Jan. 4 2009 at 9:52 pm
this poem is not my favorite, and i find it kind of weird.

but thats just my opinion.

a lot of other people seem to enjoy this, when i just don't even want to continue reading it.

just some constructive criticism .. try something new, as in possibly being a scientist not a writer.

evans said...
on Jan. 4 2009 at 5:06 pm
This was an amazing poem. I'm a ninth grade English teacher, and I'm sharing it with my classes tomorrow!

on Jan. 4 2009 at 3:37 pm
I can't say it was really a love poem to normal people, but it would be if you really understand what you're reading. For me, I like how you use the scientific elements, though I found it hard to comprehend.

FredDwashere said...
on Dec. 23 2008 at 4:59 pm
Awesome poem I loved how you combined science terminology with a poem about love. It's totally clever!

SHITHEAD said...
on Dec. 22 2008 at 8:50 pm

tweedle dee said...
on Dec. 18 2008 at 9:07 pm
kinda weird not really all that romantic.

miss said...
on Dec. 15 2008 at 5:06 pm
this poem is really cute! haha

swinginme! said...
on Dec. 14 2008 at 7:03 am
i love love love this!!! i feel kind of nerdy that i understood all of that! haha great job hon!

abmik49 said...
on Dec. 12 2008 at 9:06 pm
Oh my gosh...Thank you, guys ^ ^;; I never thought I'd get so many comments...Thanks!

And, to answer soccer: give it time. You'll feel what's right and when to do it. I know that sounds terrible, but it'll work--usually your instincts and your conscience are right, at least that's what I've found.

....AH! Thanks, everyone!! ^//^

taily123 said...
on Dec. 12 2008 at 5:21 pm
this poem is really good. I think its really cute! :]

on Dec. 11 2008 at 2:09 am
omg one of best poem ever. i feel the same way only he is dating my best friend. any advice?

on Dec. 10 2008 at 1:32 am
i relly lik dat poem that sounds like me a lot

saragw said...
on Dec. 7 2008 at 9:38 pm
i really love this first because it expresses exactly what i feel and second because i like chemistry (im taking AP Chem this year) so i loved how you worked in the imagery without making it sound overintellectual.

Morgan said...
on Dec. 5 2008 at 10:46 pm
Wow! I really liked this poem! Great job.

jman1 said...
on Dec. 5 2008 at 7:56 pm
I love it it rocks

soccerswim said...
on Dec. 5 2008 at 3:43 pm
not the most romantic poem ever, but it is a creative one and it works well.

on Dec. 5 2008 at 3:34 pm
Wow. Very nice. Superb play on words and very articulated. I love it.

abmik49 said...
on Dec. 3 2008 at 3:36 am
Well...Daghm. Thanks ^ ^ It was just one of those silly assignments they gave us in my creative writing class (write about something in the language of something else), and I just went with it. Haha...thank you ^ ^;;

JP175361 said...
on Dec. 3 2008 at 12:11 am
the elemental love is a werid love poem its only talk out the elemen

breika said...
on Nov. 27 2008 at 4:30 pm
i love this poem it leaves me speechless