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Our Goodbyes

February 22, 2013
By Monicaa GOLD, North Las Vegas, Nevada
Monicaa GOLD, North Las Vegas, Nevada
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Our Love Once Failed Us,
Because We Weren’t Strong Together.
I Once Thought That You Had Stolen My Heart
But You Just Rented

I Thought We Would Stay Together Forever,
That’s why I Showed You the Parts of Me That Weren’t All That Pretty.
But You Decided That It Was Time To Leave
You’ve Had Enough Of Our Love </3

Before We Close Our Eyes and Turn Off the Lights,
I Have to Tell You a Secret I’ve Held Inside

It’s You That I Live for and for You I Would Die


The author's comments:
I Was Inspired To Write This From Songs That I Have Been Listening To For A While

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on Jun. 6 2013 at 11:46 am
KkatKreationz PLATINUM, Minerva, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Be yourself. Everyone else is already taken.&quot; :) <br /> -Me.

Not that i need to commment. Everyone else pretty much said it all. :) Your good.

on Apr. 10 2013 at 4:36 pm
Julie1998 SILVER, Ponce, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Keep your head high, no one is better than you, so you must not make them think they are.

Cool... I liked it... You're good at poetry...

Monicaa GOLD said...
on Mar. 26 2013 at 2:55 pm
Monicaa GOLD, North Las Vegas, Nevada
11 articles 0 photos 27 comments
Thanks  :)

on Mar. 25 2013 at 8:05 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 433 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness&quot;

Its very good but i agree it could be more in depht and emotional but still I LOVED IT with all my heart

Monicaa GOLD said...
on Mar. 9 2013 at 7:06 pm
Monicaa GOLD, North Las Vegas, Nevada
11 articles 0 photos 27 comments
Thanks For The Rate :) And Thanks For Reading This <33

on Mar. 7 2013 at 9:41 pm
NadiaFilanovsky SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Knowledge speaks, but wisdom listens&quot; --Jimi Hendricks

I really love this poem, i gave it 5/5 stars!   Anyways, I think it's very literal. This is totally a writer's choice thing, but I think you could make this beautiful poem even more emotional if you tried using some figurative phrases. It's hard, I struggle with the same thing in my poems. Nonethless, this piece is brilliant *applause for you*

Monicaa GOLD said...
on Mar. 7 2013 at 1:56 pm
Monicaa GOLD, North Las Vegas, Nevada
11 articles 0 photos 27 comments
Aww Thanks You Guys <333 :)

Nico956 BRONZE said...
on Mar. 7 2013 at 1:26 pm
Nico956 BRONZE, San Juan, Texas
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Awwwww this is really good. I enjoyed reading it.

on Mar. 7 2013 at 12:43 pm
sadesdd DIAMOND, Elma, Iowa
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Simply amazing! This really fits my mood today thanks!