That last line adds the punch that the poem was leading up to. It adds the final touch. The period if you will. Hmmm....caroilnestarr did add an intersting opinion to this. The poem doens't have the format most poems use. I agree with that. Perhaps it would've worked more as an opinion piece. Yet, I think it adds more to the poem. I found poetic elements to it. Besides, you know me. I'm up for new and interesting and unique formats for poetry. It shouldn't all be the same. Most importantly to this piece is the powerful message. Strong as it should be. 

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Your goal here to get people to think, worked, 100% percent! I mean, this is really interesting. I always think these tings too and to be honest it's very overwhelming and a little bit scary, isn't it? It is! The ending.. so, eery!!

This piece really got me thinking, and I think that is what makes a piece really great. Amazing job!

I don't know if you meant to post this under poetry, but this isn't wehere it should be. Maybe it's an opinion piece? I'm not sure, but it's certainly not poetry. Also, I think it's interesting that you chose to write this in second person. It's not a bad thing, it's just interesting. It's the first thing (other than directions or recipies, of course) that I've read that was written in second person point of view. I think it was a wise choice for this piece. I would never have thought to do that, but it works very well. It makes it very, I don't know...personal, I guess? I hope you uderstand what I'm making a poor attempt to say. Haha. Another thing is that the writing doesn't seem very...mature. Maybe developed is a better word. I don't know how old you are, so it may have something to do with your age. This piece just sounds so young. If you are young, then it's obviously not a problem. You haven't had the time to mature as a writer yet! However, if you are older, this piece is about such a large revelation and I don't think the maturity or sincerity of the writing and word choice does it justice. Do you understand what I'm trying to say? I know what having this epiphany feels like, and it's a very overwhelming feeling. It is extrememely difficult to put into words, I'll give you that, but I think that if I had not already had this epiphany that you are writing about then I wouldn't be able to really appreciatre what you are trying to say. Does that make sense? I hope so. I don't really know how else to say it. Haha

I have never thoguht about this before, but this peice made me think about all of that stuff. Keep writing cause this was amazing! :)