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I Spies Despise in Society's Eyes

December 22, 2012
By JonMB SILVER, Northville, Michigan
JonMB SILVER, Northville, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"You cannot lie to the forest." -Olan Rogers


I do have eyes!
So I don't know why you had to bring about my social demise!
Appearance despise 'tis suffered by I

Y'all don't think I know that I have ashy elbows
Thanks for saying it because now the whole class knows
And yeah that person has acne
But telling them is as dumb as those cartoons about acme
They do have mirrors
Mirrors that have probably seen years of self conscious tears
Why'd you have to make it worse?
Comments like that make me want to curse or hit you with my granny's purse
Stop being terse
For all you know you might put someone in a hearse
Commiting suicide when you feel like no one is on your side
Everyone should be conscious of self consciousness
I don't care if you feel superior
That gives you no right to make anyone feel inferior
Especially about what lies on their exterior
Do you think they can change their looks?
It's not their choice who COOKs

Now I'm going to get all cliché and say
Say that the inside should hold more weigh
OKAY?
It weighs more in my store because people can't help looking poor or having an ugly sore
The core should matter more
Because I don't know what's in store for me anymore because people care more about my blackhead pore than my core
These subjective opinions being expressed are as scary as Mordor

I don't understand why we need something to criticize or exclude!
We mostly got over skin-color
Now we are getting specific with the critique of a feller
We criticize size
Or how someone's eyebrows rise
I spies so much despise in society's eyes
Eyes that cant focus on pretty skies
And only on a man's unfortunate sties
Who cares what defies the empirically accepted look of our society's eyes
All these pointless comments about the size of big thighs which are condemned by society's eyes should bring about more SIGHS
Guys just keep it to yourself
You can have your own little mental mean shelf
Just don't make people hate their self!


The author's comments:
Just a slam poem. Simply put: people's critiques have gotten outrageous.

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JonMB SILVER said...
on May. 27 2013 at 10:38 pm
JonMB SILVER, Northville, Michigan
5 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You cannot lie to the forest." -Olan Rogers

Sorry, I've been busy trying to finish up school. I will submit something now

on May. 15 2013 at 7:27 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Hey! Ahh, when do you plan on posting more stuff? I LOVE your work and I always wait for you to post something new. I'm a fan! I hope to see some new stuff eventually.. pleeeease.

JonMB SILVER said...
on Apr. 18 2013 at 3:44 pm
JonMB SILVER, Northville, Michigan
5 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You cannot lie to the forest." -Olan Rogers

Haha thank you so much! I like your stuff too.  

on Apr. 17 2013 at 7:27 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Hello! Out of my five favorites, two of your poems are in there and this is definitely one of them! First off, the title, AMAZING. Once I read the first line I had to pause the music I was listening to and read it aloud. It flowed so nicely and I felt super cool because I felt like I was rapping, haha! The way that you wrote this is so unique and particular. The word choices are really special, they are large words that rhyme well and go along with what you are saying perfectly. I love the similes and metaphors! I am so glad you used the word cliche. That was so smart and really made sense where you wrote it. Plus, I just like that word a lot, haha. The way that you capitalized certain things was very smart and really emphasized the concept of this poem. It made me smile that you used 'y'all' and 'feller' it reminded me so much of Alabama, which is where I am from. This line, 'Wo cares what defies the empirically accepted look of our society's eyes...' would have to be one of my absolute favorites. I love the ending, last line, perfect. You're an AMAZING writer, I'd love to become such a great writer like you. Wonderful!

on Jan. 5 2013 at 11:27 pm
GraphicWriter DIAMOND, Yuba City, California
63 articles 10 photos 89 comments
Oh, thank you(:

JonMB SILVER said...
on Jan. 5 2013 at 4:45 pm
JonMB SILVER, Northville, Michigan
5 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You cannot lie to the forest." -Olan Rogers

Thank you soo much! yeah it can be hard to read, and a lot depends on spoken inflections. I'm going to read your stuff now

on Jan. 5 2013 at 2:03 pm
GraphicWriter DIAMOND, Yuba City, California
63 articles 10 photos 89 comments
Woah. This is so intense. And so true. Hard to read but probably amazing to hear. I am jealous of your talent to rhyme. There are so many lines in here that I had to say out loud to really get the meaning and how the syllables linked, how words dipped and rised with each other. This is amazing. I love slam poetry, but don't write much of it myself. Wonderful job well done. There are so many lines that stick with me that just jump out and pull you in- this is a fantastic poem. (: