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June 21, 2012
By bigblue GOLD, New Market, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"All you need is Love."-The Beatles

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Fields of green,
And skies of blue.
Here with you,
This is paradise.
All awash,
With the colors of love.
Birds chirp,
And the flowers bloom.
Here with you,
In paradise.
The sun lends us its warmth,
Though we have no need of it.
For our love is a warmth of its own.
Here, the water is blue,
And the trees gently sway.
Or so you say.
But I notice not,
For i focus only on you,
My paradise.

© Michelle B., Blairsville, GA

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CeCelia32 BRONZE said...
on Sep. 15 2012 at 9:15 am
CeCelia32 BRONZE, New York City, New York
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&quot;Nobody had the heart to tell Steve the truth.&quot;<br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> - The Bee Thing :)

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This is a very sweet poem, and I think that everyone can relate to it which is very important for the reader. If the reader can't relate, they probably won't like it. You did a greeeeattt job!!! Keep it up!! :)
CeCelia32 BRONZE said...
on Sep. 15 2012 at 9:15 am
CeCelia32 BRONZE, New York City, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Nobody had the heart to tell Steve the truth.&quot;<br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> - The Bee Thing :)

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This is a very sweet poem, and I think that everyone can relate to it which is very important for the reader. If the reader can't relate, they probably won't like it. You did a greeeeattt job!!! Keep it up!! :)
bigblue GOLD said...
on Jul. 1 2012 at 12:13 pm
bigblue GOLD, New Market, Maryland
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Thanks for your feedback! I'm so glad you enjoyed it :)
thatunknownthing DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 1 2012 at 10:01 am
thatunknownthing DIAMOND, Dubai, Other
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cute poem! very optimistic, light hearted and bright, i loved the last line! beautiful, cant find any major faults. keep up the great work.
bigblue GOLD said...
on Jun. 29 2012 at 2:51 pm
bigblue GOLD, New Market, Maryland
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&quot;All you need is Love.&quot;-The Beatles

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Thank you!
ForeverDreaming BRONZE said...
on Jun. 29 2012 at 9:29 am
ForeverDreaming BRONZE, Acme, Pennsylvania
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SO cute!!! I agree with Thorn about the rhthym but this is something that I LOVE to read!!! Great job :D!
bigblue GOLD said...
on Jun. 28 2012 at 5:28 pm
bigblue GOLD, New Market, Maryland
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&quot;All you need is Love.&quot;-The Beatles

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Thanks for the feedback, Thorn! Greatly appreciated :)
Thorn BRONZE said...
on Jun. 28 2012 at 4:48 pm
Thorn BRONZE, Baltimore, Maryland
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AWWWWW! That was cute. Great word choice and imagery, too. Only thing I would suggest is to pay a little more attention to rhythm, especially if you're going to use repitition. Great job! :)