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Broken Structure

April 6, 2012
By Mimi15 PLATINUM, Belfast, Maine
Mimi15 PLATINUM, Belfast, Maine
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All we see are falling ceilings.
Our only safe haven, our only home.

Falling. Sprawling. Helplessly, to the dirt.
And all we knew then was the sky and air.

The house lived on as broken structure.
Über beautiful, yet utterly unsubstantial.

Debris and finished memories perfumed the air.
And all we'd seen we're falling roofs.

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KylieK GOLD said...
on Dec. 12 2012 at 3:11 pm
KylieK GOLD, Mt. Washington, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"To love is to surpass one's self."

I loved your imagery and how you brought life to lifeless things. Though, it pains me to see that you used slang! However, you're really getting somewhere. 5 stars :)

Nessa13 GOLD said...
on Sep. 4 2012 at 9:34 am
Nessa13 GOLD, Charlestown, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Love, but never fall in love, because things that fall get broken"
-Taylor Swift

I love this poem! It is full of..just full of amazingness! Please keep writting! And,, if you get the chance, check out some of my work (: thanks and keep writting<3

on Aug. 31 2012 at 8:48 pm
writer3499 GOLD, New Bedford, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"it's impossible to live without failing at something, unless you live so cautiously that you might has well not have lived at all-in which case you fail by default."

This is really great!! Would you mind checking out some of my work if you get a chance? Thanks, but this peice is fantastic!

on Aug. 27 2012 at 8:57 pm
PrincessOfTheStars BRONZE, Henefer, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
throw caution to the wind and just go with it.
-carrie underwood

wow that is way good normally i dont read poetry but that was amazing