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Distant Hearts
January 19, 2012
Our hearts were once bound by white thread.
Your illusions of a stronger net
unraveled the fragile bond holding us together.
Your heart embedded itself into the craters of the moon
and mine submerged itself into the stars’ fumes.
You sought to abandon me and succeeded.
But our hearts are forever entwined,
just like the stars are sewn to the moon.
We may try to erase the memories of us,
but they have been etched into our hearts.
Even as we tear ourselves further and further apart,
our hearts will recollect all the bittersweet moments.
© Leonara J., Fullerton, CA
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This article has 12 comments.
stardreamer SILVER said...
on Mar. 6 2012 at 7:26 pm
Thanks so much :) that was really helpful! I just couldn't think of any other word to replace hearts with.
This is a very solid poem. The meaning it conveys is understandable, but not so obvious, which I liked. It makes you have to read it over to really grasp it.
My favorite line is: "just like stars are sewn to the moon." I think thats a great image and use of figurative language.
My only criticism is you use the word "hearts" quite often. A little repetition is good but you've used it so much it really takes away from the poem and gets the reader muddled up on the recurring sound. Because you use it so often, you also ran into the problem of being cliche. Otherwise, this was a great poem.
My favorite line is: "just like stars are sewn to the moon." I think thats a great image and use of figurative language.
My only criticism is you use the word "hearts" quite often. A little repetition is good but you've used it so much it really takes away from the poem and gets the reader muddled up on the recurring sound. Because you use it so often, you also ran into the problem of being cliche. Otherwise, this was a great poem.
stardreamer SILVER said...
on Jan. 31 2012 at 7:13 pm
thanks :) i was a little afraid it was hard to understand
readaholic PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 30 2012 at 6:17 pm
Great poem-I had to read it twice to understand it, which is a great thing for your writing to do, especially poems. Awesome
stardreamer SILVER said...
on Jan. 26 2012 at 4:07 am
thanks :) and sure!
stardreamer SILVER said...
on Jan. 25 2012 at 2:54 pm
sure :) np and thanks
sweetgirl70 said...
on Jan. 25 2012 at 1:52 pm
hi um well thanks i will be posting my poetry soon u r really good i was wonderin if u can edit it
sweetgirl70 said...
on Jan. 25 2012 at 1:49 pm
hi that was really good i am in the middle of my poetry book too!!!!
stardreamer SILVER said...
on Jan. 25 2012 at 10:36 am
Thanks soo much :)
stardreamer SILVER said...
on Jan. 25 2012 at 4:36 am
Hey guys!! any type of feedback is welcomed. I'm looking for criticism so that I can make my poems better! :)
