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I love you, too.

January 6, 2012
By alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.


At the edge of the hospital bed
I feel a thousand miles away.
Can he hear me?
I hope he can hear me.
My heart ushers his eyes to open
Only to find stillness in return.
I want to paint his face
Put the color back in his once rosy cheeks.
Just yesterday that smile lit up the room.
Now the beep of his heart rate reminds me
To breath
To touch
To feel
I want to break the monitor.
Put a miracle in the rhythm
Of a heart that fails to keep beating.
The wires all over are holding him here
Giving me one last chance
To say goodbye.
If he can even hear me.
I pray to God he can hear me.
I find his hand under the sheets
I hold onto it for dear life.
My heart aches to feel the warmth
To feel the life that loved to live
To hear his laughter once again
And put it in my dreams for safe keeping.
Daddies are supposed to laugh.
Why can't I hear him one more time?
The memories stay as his soul leaves
I say the last words I want him to hear
Can he hear me?
I pray to God he can hear me.
His voice echoes in my head
"I love you, too."


The author's comments:
My dad passed away last year and poetry has helped me cope. It's my heart spilled out into words. It feels amazing.

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on Jan. 10 2012 at 11:16 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 373 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

First of all the imagery is beautiful! It makes everything come alive, especially the painting his face part. This is one poem where I can truly feel the emotion. The aching heart, I felt it. I've read a lot of poems, and this is with the best of them! I loved it!

on Jan. 10 2012 at 10:51 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

thanks :) i'm glad you like it

on Jan. 10 2012 at 10:51 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

thank you :) it's believable because it's 100% true.

on Jan. 10 2012 at 10:43 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

thanks :) very much appreciated

on Jan. 10 2012 at 10:43 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

thank you both :)

on Jan. 10 2012 at 10:42 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

thank you. :)

on Jan. 10 2012 at 10:42 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

that means SO much to me. thank you

on Jan. 10 2012 at 10:41 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

thank you. and thanks for replying

on Jan. 10 2012 at 10:41 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

thanks so much :)

on Jan. 10 2012 at 10:41 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

thank you :) i'm sorry to hear about your cousin. I love how poetry can bring so many people together

on Jan. 10 2012 at 10:40 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

thank you! i appreciate it

on Jan. 10 2012 at 10:39 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

thank you :)

on Jan. 10 2012 at 10:39 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

thanks :) I will.

on Jan. 10 2012 at 10:39 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

thanks :) and thanks for replying.

on Jan. 10 2012 at 10:38 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

Thank you all for replying on my poem. It means the WORLD to me. Thank you so much.

on Jan. 10 2012 at 9:25 pm
IdentityMangler PLATINUM, Baton Rouge, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
Be kind. You never know whose fighting for their life.

This is wonderful. I understand every heartbeat of it. My cousin died not even a year ago and this poem tuggs at those emotions. Very well done :)

on Jan. 10 2012 at 9:22 pm
hotshot PLATINUM, North Sioux City, South Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
Go confidently in the direction of your dreams. Live the life you have imagined.
Henry David Thoreau

you really caught my attention with this. you caught me and sent me through memories i once had to dwell over. no matter what you do keep this up. because your very good at this

on Jan. 10 2012 at 9:15 pm
recurring_resilience SILVER, Ashburn, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"These are the times that try men's souls." - Thomas Paine.

"You don't understand! I coulda had class. I coulda been a contender. I could've been somebody, instead of a bum, which is what I am." - On the Water Front

"This is my place of failure."

This has to be one of the saddest poems I've ever read.. I like how you portray things like "paint his rosey cheeks". Truly amazing.

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on Jan. 10 2012 at 8:48 pm
-Char- GOLD, Council Bluffs, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
The true friends are the ones who can get you to laugh even in your darkest depressions. ~Me

You are a rare one. A TRUE poet.

on Jan. 10 2012 at 8:45 pm
CaptainStar BRONZE, Estancia, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
Your limit is what you make it.

This was very emotional and heart filled. It actually earned a tear. Fantastic writing and keep up the good work.