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Birthday Candles

December 28, 2011
By marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

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The three decker cake stood before me on the table
All thirteen candles lit and waiting,

The wax melting and fading,
And the base plunged into the goodness of vanilla icing

As the spotlight birthday song continued to be sung.
Once it’s over, the candles seem to get brighter,

Smiles seem to get wider,
And the balloons seem to get lighter

As I stare at the round, sugary cake.
I can feel everybody’s eyes on me,
Beckoning my wish to come and blow out the candles,

So that the mocking cake can be devoured.
I can’t think of my wish or how to put it in words;
I feel pressured with all the family’s and camera’s eyes

Poised on me with expectance.
The icing covered cake sweats on the table,

And within seconds I make up my mind
I take a deep breath and blow 12 flaming candles out

And on the 13th I whisper softly,
'I blew out my birthday candles

And wished for you.'

© Meghan T., Scottsdale, AZ

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Dedication:





To Noah,
I will always be wishing for you.
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smichelle SILVER said...
on Jan. 20 2012 at 7:33 pm
smichelle SILVER, Pewee Valley, Kentucky
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i love this, i feel like we are there with you at this party. I really did not see the end coming though, Maybe a few subtiles hints would've been a little betteer. But it's an amazing poem.
marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 20 2012 at 7:27 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

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Thaaank you :D i'm really glad my poem can make people feel like that. :) and yay! thats what i aim for! For people to be able to relate. I wish on 11:11s too :P I think your wish will come true someday. =) and thanks!!
Choosing2Live4Christ PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 20 2012 at 7:26 pm
Choosing2Live4Christ PLATINUM, Wausaukee, Wisconsin
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you're welcome! I get that a lot :-)
marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 20 2012 at 7:23 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

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thank you thank you thank you! =)
marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 20 2012 at 7:23 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

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:D thanks!
marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 20 2012 at 7:22 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

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You and i both know that you're not a little boy and < 3 thank you =) , Mr. Guy I Wished For ;)
marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 20 2012 at 7:21 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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&quot;If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you&#039;ll know it. I don&#039;t think you should wait. I think you should speak now.&quot; -Taylor Swift

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thanks! =) i like your screen name, btw!
Inksy SILVER said...
on Jan. 20 2012 at 4:34 pm
Inksy SILVER, A, Utah
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Aw, this is really cute (: The details are amazing. I'm literally sitting there with you, watching you blow out your candles (: And... I can totally relate to it. I've wished on countless shooting stars and 11:11's wishing for a certain person... sigh. ANYWAYS. You are an amazing writer, keep writing! (:
.king. SILVER said...
on Jan. 20 2012 at 6:53 am
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
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That was sweet, it felt like I was invited, l like the included details, I love it, nice share !
Destinee BRONZE said...
on Jan. 19 2012 at 11:34 pm
Destinee BRONZE, Oakville, Other
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That was actually really good! I loved the ending. Totally unexpected. :)
N.k. said...
on Jan. 19 2012 at 7:35 pm
Little boy here, just wanted to say that this poem was really, just indulging, it pulls u in and never lets u go. I love it and it really described the seen, -little boy
Choosing2Live4Christ PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 19 2012 at 7:11 pm
Choosing2Live4Christ PLATINUM, Wausaukee, Wisconsin
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I love the ending, it's so sweet! :)
marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 19 2012 at 5:08 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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&quot;If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you&#039;ll know it. I don&#039;t think you should wait. I think you should speak now.&quot; -Taylor Swift

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thanks! :D
marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 19 2012 at 5:07 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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&quot;If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you&#039;ll know it. I don&#039;t think you should wait. I think you should speak now.&quot; -Taylor Swift

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Thank you and here...*hands Sokon492 a cyber cake*
marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 19 2012 at 5:07 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you&#039;ll know it. I don&#039;t think you should wait. I think you should speak now.&quot; -Taylor Swift

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o.O two comments, same person :p
AngelsLullaby GOLD said...
on Jan. 18 2012 at 11:37 pm
AngelsLullaby GOLD, Neverland, Idaho
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I loved the imagery in this poem. And the ending was so sweet. 5/5 stars
Sokon492 SILVER said...
on Jan. 18 2012 at 8:55 pm
Sokon492 SILVER, San Jacinto, California
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its a good poem........... now i want cake
Sokon492 SILVER said...
on Jan. 18 2012 at 8:54 pm
Sokon492 SILVER, San Jacinto, California
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its pretty good ..... now i want cake
marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 18 2012 at 4:59 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you&#039;ll know it. I don&#039;t think you should wait. I think you should speak now.&quot; -Taylor Swift

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thanks! =)
-Kal- GOLD said...
on Jan. 18 2012 at 4:57 pm
-Kal- GOLD, Carthage, North Carolina
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That was so sweet :) Good job :)