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The Break Up

November 25, 2011
By BrittaneyPeacock DIAMOND, Houston, Texas
BrittaneyPeacock DIAMOND, Houston, Texas
94 articles 46 photos 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be yourself and never change for no one, If they can't except you for you then don't have them".
"Go after your dreams, do whatever it takes to get there and never let go". "Live life to the fullest cause there is never tomorrow".


I hear your voice it makes me smile gladly
I see your brown eyes it makes me gaze back into yours
I hear you say my name makes me perk up I say I love you
You ask me to take a walk and all you can do is go on about you
and not ask how I've been and I said I love you and
Yet you don't say it back
You ask me to sit and you turn and look at me with your brown eyes and
all you have to tell me is I'm sorry I'm done with you
I mean It's been good and all but I found someone else that is better
for me but I do want you to know I did love you but I just wasn't
In love with you and I hope we can remain friends
What I hear his voice I am silent for a moment and I look down and start to tear up
I say so you love me but your not in love with me and you just hurt me like this
You say your really sorry but you don't sound so truthful
I get up and say no I'm sorry and I just walk away and never looked back that day and we all just went our own separate ways that very same day


The author's comments:
This is just a small poem about a girl who thought she found the guy she has always been looking for and he just turns and breaks up with her

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on Dec. 12 2011 at 9:42 am
Arya4Eragon PLATINUM, Jonesboro, Arkansas
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Favorite Quote:
"Without life there is still faith, but without faith there is no life." -SJB

:)

 


on Dec. 12 2011 at 9:40 am
BrittaneyPeacock DIAMOND, Houston, Texas
94 articles 46 photos 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be yourself and never change for no one, If they can't except you for you then don't have them".
"Go after your dreams, do whatever it takes to get there and never let go". "Live life to the fullest cause there is never tomorrow".

Thank you for the comment and good feedback. and I will continue to write

on Dec. 12 2011 at 9:35 am
Arya4Eragon PLATINUM, Jonesboro, Arkansas
20 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Without life there is still faith, but without faith there is no life." -SJB

The meter seems a little off on the poem, but I love the message.  A good poet can write a poem everyone can relate to, and that's what you've done here.  Even if one hasn't suffered a break up, they can still relate by way of knowing someone or having witnessed a break up.

Keep writing!