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Taking A Chance

August 20, 2011
By thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.


Watching from the outside
Through the stain glass window
Alone.
His heart falls down
Like a man judged by God
Scared.
Believers are inside, their fingers
Tracing beads of mysteries
Faith.
Her prayers are like lightning bolts
Striking up into the clouds… God catching them
Desperation.
She asks for doves with branches
To encircle him… haloing his head
Hopefulness.
Please, Please, she thinks in her mind
Weeks pass by… he’s watching from the outside
Patience.
And then the church feels a rush of wind
As grand oak doors whoosh open
Breathe
He steps in touches blessed water
To his face… water collecting in her eyes.
Amen.


The author's comments:
Based on a true event, this shows what the power of prayer can do to change a person's life.

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on Oct. 21 2011 at 6:52 pm
AbstractFragment GOLD, Dalmatia,, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"You know what it feels like when all your teeth are falling out really slowly and you don't realize and then you notice that, well, they're really far apart. And then one day... you don't have any teeth anymore." - Where the Wild Things Are

I normally don't like religious peaces but this one I feel hits the nail on the head. I love how much power the single word lines carry. They are very heavy and they rest of the lines are nice and flowing which balance it out.

on Oct. 20 2011 at 12:48 pm
RayBaytheDinosaur GOLD, Hampton, South Carolina
18 articles 17 photos 159 comments

Favorite Quote:
Beauty is in the eye of the beholder

I love the meaning of this poem =) so many christians think that we can change people into believing what we do, but really, The holy spirits the only thing that can change someones heart, all we can do is give them information xD we're just the messengers from big guns upstairs, you know? lol

leafy said...
on Sep. 13 2011 at 2:21 pm
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

I love this po, and it was so beautifully written. Keep up the great work! 5/5

on Sep. 10 2011 at 6:32 pm
Regs_the_Shorty GOLD, Frankfort, Illinois
13 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are people who finish what they start and.....

I pray everyday and this poem shows you that god does listen even when you think he doesn't. 5 stars

on Sep. 5 2011 at 5:44 pm
Regs_the_Shorty GOLD, Frankfort, Illinois
13 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are people who finish what they start and.....

THE RESULTS ARE UP sorry it took me so long! :)

on Sep. 5 2011 at 7:43 am
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
31 articles 6 photos 577 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

I love the format; it does so well to add to the meaning of the poem. I honestly love how you put it together; powerful message and great writing. :)

on Sep. 1 2011 at 7:20 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Beautiful, and vague, but poetry doesn't always have to make sense, and sometimes I think it's better if it doesn't :)

on Aug. 28 2011 at 5:14 pm
Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
9 articles 3 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything will be ok in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end."

Oh, that's neat!

on Aug. 28 2011 at 12:28 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 351 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

It's about a man who is lost and doesn't know God and a woman who loves God and wants so badly for the lost man to let God into his life. The woman prays and prays for the man, and finally her prayers are answered. The man takes that chance and enters the church. His life will be forever changed because he has opened himself up to receiving Christ into his life! :)

cowgirl4ever said...
on Aug. 28 2011 at 9:12 am
Well written! I didn't quite understand this poem, but I liked it.