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One Step Ahead

August 20, 2011
By Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran


(Shuddering) They kept coming back

Each time with different names and different stories
But always with that same blankness
Crawling beneath their skin
Faces pulled taut by snarls wearing the costume of grins
A phantom mien which reached across a crowded room
They would slip little notes
Into open doors and open hands
No one ever saw them going about on their dark business
Their shadows walked on a higher plane of existence
You tried to tell them boldly:
“Prepare for a crash landing!”
But they only sneered
At your spark of hope, as it smoldered out, beneath a clump of ash

Their sighs inhuman, like deflating balloons
When gun or hot breath was pressed
To the back of their pale necks
They are the Hollow Men
You first began to die
When the little, red clown sitting in the corner of the room
Pointed out the thousands of eyes
Twinkling in the ceiling of your bedroom
You tried to tie a noose from the handkerchiefs
Which he kept pulling from his laughing mouth
But you ended up tangled
In the ringing sound
Of his taunts
Their taunts

What’s left to trust
Drains from your closed fists
Whenever you shove it right under somebody’s nose
He never knows who’s in on it
You know to what I’m referring
The plan, the game
Your prison
Your life (now, that is)
So take his hand, will you, you pretty daughter of the outside?
Run away together, or try, at least

All the while
They are idly checking the hourglass
Which floats behind their unblinking eyes
It’s measuring the sands of time
Until somebody has to really die
So will you retire?
Or will you keep creeping down in that Cadillac
Through the sounds of gunshot in the nighttime streets?
Whatever you decide
They will be watching
And grinning
Because they always stay one step
Ahead of the game


The author's comments:
What do you feel?

Because I look at hundreds of blank faces, whenever I go into the city at night. And sometimes I wonder:
Is there anything else?

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on Aug. 27 2011 at 3:00 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Il mio cuore si ferma e calma, non proprio l'assenza di parole, ma una presenza di sentimento. Il mio cuore è felice e tranquillo.

on Aug. 27 2011 at 2:31 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Che cosa è possibile ascoltare e sentire loro, che cosa dice il tuo cuore?

on Aug. 27 2011 at 1:18 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Sì, anche se non mi sento tanto come si sentono, la maggior parte del tempo.

on Aug. 27 2011 at 12:15 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

I see now. :)

 


on Aug. 27 2011 at 12:14 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

And thanks be to the Sun for that, that He doesn't leave me in the darkness, even if I got myself trapped in the first place. I'm lying there, watching the web close over me, and I'm just about to surrendur; when I feel that tender hand of warmth upon my shoulder. The salvation in the Sun.

Riesci a sentire il suono di sussurrare angeli?

 


on Aug. 27 2011 at 12:00 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 564 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

You obviously, you did write this poem yes? ;)

on Aug. 27 2011 at 11:53 am
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Lady Gaga? Hmmmm.

I'm not a huge fan of hers, but I'm quite grateful to receive that compliment from someone who is!

You then, can be the Priscilla Ahn of poetry.


on Aug. 27 2011 at 11:51 am
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Who is doing the sharing?

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Aug. 27 2011 at 4:55 am
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

Your poem reminds me when I'm in another new city, in a big crowd.

Personally, I think you're the Lady Gaga of poetry. That's a comment from me because I'm a HUGE fan of hers. 


on Aug. 26 2011 at 8:54 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 564 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

Darkness isn't meant to be hoarded, but shared.

on Aug. 26 2011 at 7:41 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

But the daylight will always peek through to reach you, helping you to find your way through. 

あなたは歓迎、サイレントウィーバーです。


on Aug. 26 2011 at 7:03 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Righ' outta ta' darkness. I could almost hear a sigh of complaint from the night as I stole some of its substance.

Thank you, Liz, thank you!


on Aug. 26 2011 at 7:00 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Sometimes they are hollow and black, others they are diamond-space. Sometimes I've even seen them come in gift wrap, though I'm never really fooled.

Dzięki, Córka gwiazdy! I have indeed been testing my skill with these spiderwebs you speak of. I hate it though, when I get tangled, and the silky string obscures my view of the daylight.


on Aug. 24 2011 at 7:12 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 564 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

Yes I was just wondering when you'd come out with a new masterpiece as well.  Weaved out of darkness this poem is.  It reminded me of gang wars too!  Well done, Raven, well done.

on Aug. 24 2011 at 5:24 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Hollow black bones, they have, not the diamond-space ones I am accustomed to.

I was wondering when I would get to read a new masterpiece of yours. This one is crafted of spider webs and vaguaries. Reminding me of gang wars, subtle corruption and a war without end.