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Time...

August 10, 2011
By Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott


The stream, it flows,
Heedlessly of where it goes
The fly buzzes ‘round and round,
Reason simply cannot be found

within its motions
And so we beg the minute hand,
To move faster, and
When the clock strikes two,
The lost hour I rue

I said I wanted to be big and tall
Yet now, clutching at my toys, my picture books,
As they give, and I fall
Faster, faster, faster, seconds, minutes, days, and weeks
Caught in the moment, in the simple task
Each closes their eyes and pretends not
To notice the air rushing by, and
The fly circling ‘round, and
The stream trickling still, and
Then eyes flash open
Now milky, the sparkle gone
Hair white, skin wrinkled
Squint nearsightedly, at the distant places
Seen so clearly, it seems, not a day before; and now
To sigh, to wonder, and to cry
“Where is that time?”


The author's comments:
I am sometimes horrified at the speed with which time flies. Sometimes I worry that life will fly by much too quickly, and I'll wake up old and feeble, full of regrets and empty of dreams.
Let me know what you think, open to any comments, good or bad.

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on Mar. 13 2012 at 4:54 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Thanks for taking the time to read!

on Mar. 13 2012 at 4:47 pm
yazigirl BRONZE, Athens, Texas
1 article 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"people say hell is endless. i say hell is empty and all the demons are here"- one tree hill

it was good, and i think its something we can all compare to- time passing and finding youself in an empty room, the only thing there, your memories. very good!

Mayzzzz GOLD said...
on Aug. 31 2011 at 10:48 pm
Mayzzzz GOLD, HOBBS, New Mexico
14 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
I say "you know you love me" all the time. My mom said it and my aunt said it all the time. To me it means that i know the ones close to me love me and I dont always have to be told that they love me when i already know. I love my family..

yes i have read it and it was great as welllll

on Aug. 28 2011 at 1:22 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
24 articles 0 photos 382 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Thank you.

on Aug. 26 2011 at 10:52 pm
Kenniekonglee PLATINUM, Ampang, Other
30 articles 3 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
. Just smile L:

haha~ it was part funny!! likes it~~ 5/5 for this!! >v<

on Aug. 21 2011 at 5:49 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
24 articles 0 photos 382 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Thank you very much! ("secrets" is the latest piece I had posted, did you read it?)

Mayzzzz GOLD said...
on Aug. 20 2011 at 11:28 am
Mayzzzz GOLD, HOBBS, New Mexico
14 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
I say "you know you love me" all the time. My mom said it and my aunt said it all the time. To me it means that i know the ones close to me love me and I dont always have to be told that they love me when i already know. I love my family..

i love all your work there alll great cant wait to read what your going to post next

on Aug. 16 2011 at 12:48 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
24 articles 0 photos 382 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

That's funny, now I want to look at your poem:) Thank you, I'm glad you like it, and honestly, I'm pretty old fashioned too, so I guess it's natural for my poem to reflect that.

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on Aug. 16 2011 at 12:35 pm
A_____, Columbus, Ohio
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Woah!  The title is just the opposite of my poem, which is called "...Time"!  Anyways, I really liked yours!  Your style wasn't as modern, I thought, with the "'rounds" and things like that.  I really liked it, how sometimes it rhymed and sometimes not, and also the descriptions and the line breaks when you left the "and" on the first line and continued on the next.  It was just great!

on Aug. 16 2011 at 7:30 am
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
24 articles 0 photos 382 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Thank you! I just wrote another poem yesterday, and I'll probably submit it today.

on Aug. 15 2011 at 9:14 pm
Cissypercflute GOLD, Randolph, Massachusetts
10 articles 5 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A road to a friend's house is never long."
-Danish proverb

This is beautiful .... I love the descriptions .... Marvellous job.
PS: I'll be waiting for your next teen Ink submission.
Lovely Job.

on Aug. 15 2011 at 2:25 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
24 articles 0 photos 382 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Thank you, actually, the line "within its motions" was goofed up by Teen Ink, I intended it to be only indented, but for some reason, they made it a new stanza

on Aug. 15 2011 at 1:08 pm
Kbuschan PLATINUM, South Plainfield, New Jersey
25 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
Fall in love or fall in hate; Get inspired or be depressed; Ace a test or flunk a class; Make babies or make art; Speak the truth or lie and cheat; Dance on tables or sit in the corner; Life is divine chaos. Embrace it. Breathe. And enjoy the ride...

i like the feeling of feeling rushed that you have going throughout the poem and i think you added just the right amount of descriptions as so not to steer away from the original idead. the only thing is that in the first stanza last line reasons simply cannot be found

within its motions, it should be part of the same stanza so that it flows better. but good job overall :)


on Aug. 15 2011 at 8:51 am
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
24 articles 0 photos 382 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Thank you.

on Aug. 14 2011 at 10:03 pm
WithPenAndScript DIAMOND, Venetia, Pennsylvania
72 articles 232 photos 251 comments

Favorite Quote:
I believe that no matter who you are we all leave footprints on this Earth

:) Very good