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Time On A Road That Never Ends

July 13, 2011
By vzimmerman PLATINUM, Ontario, New York
vzimmerman PLATINUM, Ontario, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Happiness is the key to success, if you love what your doing you will be successful."


Time of the abondoned.
Silence, your best friend.
Caught on a lonely road that never ends.
Moon guides you with mysterious glow.
Night loneliness clogs what you know.
Quiet surroundings has thought.
Mother Nature, a wonder, a beauty that can't be bought.
Reality sinks.
Time to breath.
Time to think.
Calm breathes cleanse everything.
Coldness, body shivering.
Moon drops.
Feeling stops.
Environment changes within each second like a top.
Sun rises, so new, so bright.
Warmth, light and new sight.
Now can you see the end of the road.



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on Jul. 18 2011 at 1:17 pm
vzimmerman PLATINUM, Ontario, New York
40 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Happiness is the key to success, if you love what your doing you will be successful."

Those 3 words you commented actually went a long way. So thank you. And I will check out your work. :)

on Jul. 18 2011 at 1:16 pm
vzimmerman PLATINUM, Ontario, New York
40 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Happiness is the key to success, if you love what your doing you will be successful."

Thanks for the comment! I will check out your work!

on Jul. 18 2011 at 1:15 pm
vzimmerman PLATINUM, Ontario, New York
40 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Happiness is the key to success, if you love what your doing you will be successful."

WOW! Never have I seen someone comment on my different non-recognizable pattern. I am glad to hear that you liked it and it fits the poem. I thank you for that unique comment though. I will now think of how the rhyming pattern will come into play in future poems. Thank you! That helped so much:) 

on Jul. 18 2011 at 1:12 pm
vzimmerman PLATINUM, Ontario, New York
40 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Happiness is the key to success, if you love what your doing you will be successful."

Thank you so much for the comment. Sorry I haven't been on in since I posted my pieces actually. I am glad you can connect with it and it really hits your heart. That is my main goals, and I am happy to hear I accomplished it. :) So thanks again! 

dinesh vs said...
on Jul. 18 2011 at 10:24 am
wonderful poem i like it

zone7294 GOLD said...
on Jul. 14 2011 at 7:18 pm
zone7294 GOLD, Newport News, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
If im good for nothing, then your bad for everything

I really like this poem you did a good job on it I wrote a poem and I'd appreciate it if you'd take a look at it and tell me what you think here's the link: TeenInk.com/poetry/sonnet/article/349224/Addicted/

on Jul. 14 2011 at 2:51 pm
msoccerm345 SILVER, Grimes, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
You never know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have.

i really liked this poem because it reminds me of what i have been going through.. i couldnt see the end of the road earlier this year.. i was drenched in sadness and lost without anywhere to go.. im still on the road but i can definately see the end of all this feeling of sadness and the begining of ag reat future. this is an amazing poem. definatley one of my favorites.

on Jul. 14 2011 at 10:13 am
Echinacea8 GOLD, Richmond, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Somebody said that it couldn't be done, but he with a chuckle replied that maybe it couldn't [and maybe it shouldn't], but he wouldn't be the one to say so until he tired" - Edgar Albert Guest

Normally I don't like rhyming poems, but the way you presented it created a very haunting impression which fitted the topic perfectly. By that I suppose I am trying to say is by not having complete sentences and a recognizable pattern it help convey how raw this particular time of day is. I hope that makes sense! Keep writing!!

on Jul. 13 2011 at 11:45 pm
ElleNicole BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"My role in society, or any artist's or poet's role, is to try and express what we all feel. Not to tell people how to feel. Not as a preacher, not as a leader, but as a reflection of us all."

I enjoyed this. Nice work!

Check out my poem? Thanks if you do. =)


firenrain GOLD said...
on Jul. 13 2011 at 10:12 pm
firenrain GOLD, Belle Mead, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A room without books is like a body without a soul."

- Cicero

Roman author, orator, & politician (106 BC - 43 BC)

nice flow, emotion, and rhythm :)

can you check out my poem and give me some feedback? thanks.


Anagam BRONZE said...
on Jul. 13 2011 at 9:13 pm
Anagam BRONZE, Tulsa, Oklahoma
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wish i could see the end of ther road... i will, not yet though. your poems is really insightful

on Jul. 13 2011 at 4:14 pm
Midnight_Poetry14 BRONZE, St. Peters, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"All religion, my friend, is simply evolved out of fraud, fear, greed, imagination, and poetry."
-Edgar Allan Poe

Beautiful. :)