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My Demon

July 6, 2011
By ArgonElement SILVER, The Woodlands, Texas
ArgonElement SILVER, The Woodlands, Texas
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My demon came out today,
I stood in front of my father,

my loving father,

And it burst up my rib cage,
brushing it's needle feathers,

against my heart,

and clawed up my throat.

I could have forced it down,
swallowing it back,
deep inside me.

But, I didn’t.

I let it loose.
It looked through my mouth,

at my father,

and grinned.

It let loose a torrent,

of hot, acidic words,

That hit my father’s face,
and I watched.

He became a sculpture.
Face,

an ashen mask of disgust and disbelief and

sorrow.

His own child.
Hurting him.

I watched.
Like an onlooker watching,

a car accident.

I watched my demon smashing my father,

internally,

and I wanted to scream,

IT’S NOT ME!

But, my demon retreated,
into my soul,

I felt it settle into it’s black home,

And I stood,
tears,
drip
drip


Sorry, Dad.

He shook his head,
the wounds
of my demon’s

lashing words,

Still raw, still bleeding.

I stuttered,
It was my demon, Dad.

He smiled,
eyes crinkling

and he looked so tired


beaten.

He opened his mouth,

voice hoarse,
and whispered, shakily,




The demon is you.


The author's comments:
Something I came up with after I totally screamed at my old man.

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on Jul. 16 2011 at 2:36 pm
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This was written very well. I like your style.

on Jul. 13 2011 at 9:42 am
ArgonElement SILVER, The Woodlands, Texas
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Yah, it's that moment when you just say something awful to someone you really love and then regret instantly. And thanks for reading!

on Jul. 13 2011 at 9:40 am
ArgonElement SILVER, The Woodlands, Texas
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Thanks, NinjaGirl! Raw emotion is definately my thing.

on Jul. 13 2011 at 9:39 am
ArgonElement SILVER, The Woodlands, Texas
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Thank you Garnet it means a lot! Yah, I try to convey my emotion instability into my poems by writing them when I'm upset. It is easier to write about it after it just happened you know?

on Jul. 13 2011 at 9:37 am
ArgonElement SILVER, The Woodlands, Texas
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Thanks! I didn't know I had a style, though!

on Jul. 13 2011 at 9:03 am
ArgonElement SILVER, The Woodlands, Texas
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Thank you, Megan.J.B.

on Jul. 13 2011 at 4:55 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

This poem is very interesting and very emotional. It shows how we can lose our self-control sometimes... 

on Jul. 13 2011 at 12:49 am
NinjaGirl BRONZE, Valley City, North Dakota
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The only thing holding us back in life is our desire to stay where we are and not venture further.
~Some random person on the Internet :P

This is packed full of raw emotion and the struggle between the character and him/herself internally. Love it!

on Jul. 13 2011 at 12:37 am
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
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"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

Whoa. That ending was amazing! I don't know how or when this poem sucked me in, but it just did, which mean it must be pretty good. You let the readers feel the struggling emotion of the character. This is really amazing. :)

on Jul. 12 2011 at 7:15 pm
Danealle SILVER, Wheeling, Illinois
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Anything is possible with a smile and goal in mind.

I like the style your showing here!

Megan.J.B said...
on Jul. 12 2011 at 11:12 am
Megan.J.B, Sault Ste Marie, Other
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"Here's the real truth. There are eight million people in this city. And those teeming masses exist for the sole purpose of lifting the few exceptional people onto their shoulders. You, me? We're exceptional."
- Green Goblin. :)

I liked this a lot! I agree with the comment about be subtle, it was nice. :) Very refreshing style too. 

on Jul. 11 2011 at 5:44 pm
ArgonElement SILVER, The Woodlands, Texas
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Haha, Owl, no sense makes sense to me! And subtlety is probably harder for teen writers, especially me! Thank you for reading!

on Jul. 11 2011 at 2:58 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
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"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

This was wonderful! (: The emotion is great and I LOVE the way it isn't so...common. You didn't come right out and say what it was about, so it's not annoying in that way. (Yes, I do realize I make no sense). Anyway, beautiful!

on Jul. 11 2011 at 9:59 am
ArgonElement SILVER, The Woodlands, Texas
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Thank you! My dad and me are really tight, so little fights between us just set me off on writing rampages.

on Jul. 10 2011 at 9:01 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
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"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

This is a great poem!  It shows how sometimes our words aren't our own when we're angry.  Good job! :)