Simply Slipped | Teen Ink

Simply Slipped

February 20, 2011
By tristenisolde BRONZE, Dingmans Ferry, Pennsylvania
tristenisolde BRONZE, Dingmans Ferry, Pennsylvania
1 article 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
One good thing about music,when it hits you, you feel no pain.


Gone astray to a broken bridge
Letting my mind wander and my legs dangle
Fighting the urge to drop below
Temptation overwhelms my frigid limbs, numb with pain
One step away from the end
A wicked thought pushed to the cliff's edge
Ready to force out the life,
Stomp out the jealousy, take out the spark
Steady for just a single moment
Alive and breathing for once in my life
Make the death blow quietly away
Take my dreams into a jar, securely closed
Slip into the ice of another place
Leave this cruel world with one more word
Forget the past and the future
Live in what they believe is the present
Suck in the last breath, LIFE
Exhale...and jump because this is the beginning


The author's comments:
I wanted to step in the shoes of somebody who couldn't take it anymore and what they would do when they were taking their last breath,thinking their last thought.

Similar Articles

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 10 comments.


on Mar. 8 2011 at 9:22 pm
Monkee63 SILVER, Independence, Kentucky
9 articles 0 photos 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I want to feel my life while I&#039;m in it&quot;- Meryl Streep<br /> &quot;Live, Life Love&quot;<br /> &quot;Everybody wants happiness, nobody wants pain, but you can&#039;t have a rainbow without a little rain.&quot;

Your welcome. I've had some hard times in life lately but not like that...but it has a personal touch to it and I like that a lot.

on Mar. 8 2011 at 2:21 pm
tristenisolde BRONZE, Dingmans Ferry, Pennsylvania
1 article 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
One good thing about music,when it hits you, you feel no pain.

Thank you soooo much:D

on Mar. 8 2011 at 2:20 pm
tristenisolde BRONZE, Dingmans Ferry, Pennsylvania
1 article 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
One good thing about music,when it hits you, you feel no pain.

Thanks:) I'm hoping to go into a career of this so yeah I'll be doing a lot more writing

 


on Mar. 8 2011 at 2:19 pm
tristenisolde BRONZE, Dingmans Ferry, Pennsylvania
1 article 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
One good thing about music,when it hits you, you feel no pain.

Thank you!!! I tried to make it as real and deep as possible. Like I said I've never been through something like this but I can only imagine.

zeroo said...
on Mar. 8 2011 at 12:26 pm
zeroo, Indianapolis Indiana, Indiana
0 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
carpe diem

filled with emotion i love these types of poems very good keep up the good work and ican relate with this poem

on Mar. 8 2011 at 9:58 am
Monkee63 SILVER, Independence, Kentucky
9 articles 0 photos 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I want to feel my life while I&#039;m in it&quot;- Meryl Streep<br /> &quot;Live, Life Love&quot;<br /> &quot;Everybody wants happiness, nobody wants pain, but you can&#039;t have a rainbow without a little rain.&quot;

This is really good. It's deep. I llike it a lot!

on Mar. 7 2011 at 6:32 pm
tessafletcher GOLD, Midlothian, Virginia
15 articles 24 photos 9 comments
reallly good!

on Mar. 6 2011 at 4:24 pm
live2dance SILVER, Rolling Meadows, Illinois
7 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
stand in your own place and know you are there.

wow you need to keep writing this is very very good! <3 it!

on Mar. 6 2011 at 2:37 pm
tristenisolde BRONZE, Dingmans Ferry, Pennsylvania
1 article 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
One good thing about music,when it hits you, you feel no pain.

Thank you very much. I am glad that you liked it and have made it past your hardships. I have never been through something like I displayed in the poem but I know how it must feel. Again thank you:)

hope95 SILVER said...
on Mar. 6 2011 at 2:23 pm
hope95 SILVER, Hamilton, Ohio
6 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
life is hard but death is cruel so put your big girl boots on and deal with it. my life has been harsh but im learning to deal with it one day at a time. life is like a box of chocolates, you never know watchya gonna get:)

this is very good and i, being someone who often thinks this way, think u have captured the thoughts perfectly. life gives us many hard times but i am happy to say that i personally am glad that i was/am able to make it through everyday without taking my thought's actions and i hope nobody has to go through this, though i know many do.