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Just Another Dead " I Love You"

February 7, 2011
By Brokenness_is_Beautiful SILVER, Independece, Louisiana
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How was I supposed to know
you did not really mean it.

How would I know
you were just another
sack of lies.

You thought this was a
game you played my heart.

Well thanks for nothing
the words were said too often
so it cut even deeper
now I see
they were used to sugar coat things you could say.

Nothing real about them
just another dead I love you
to write in my book
titled Alone and Stupid.

I fell for it again
I just can't believe it.

Just another
dead I love you...
nothing special.

The author's comments:
My big brother got into trouble. I felt betrayed and angry. This was the outcome of my rage and emptiness.
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This article has 18 comments.

Shivam GOLD said...
on Feb. 13 2012 at 6:56 am
Shivam GOLD, Lucknow, Other
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Its nothing like nothing or all.. its just that how far you climb up the tree before you fall..

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just another deep one.... wow..
SuNshiNe007 ELITE said...
on Feb. 3 2012 at 8:31 am
SuNshiNe007 ELITE, Magee Ms., Mississippi
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I love this! Great Job. And I know I say that alot! Now I have to ask!! Have you ever thought of maybe writing a poetry book?? You are just so good! I think not only people on this site but people all over should have the chance to read your work! I believe your writings help anyone who reads your work!!:) I have written and gotten poems published in books before and it is amazing how people change once they read what someone writes!
Brokenness_is_Beautiful SILVER said...
on Dec. 8 2011 at 9:29 am
Brokenness_is_Beautiful SILVER, Independece, Louisiana
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Thanks, I really appreciate it.
yungwill GOLD said...
on Dec. 8 2011 at 9:16 am
yungwill GOLD, Killeen, Texas
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that is very deep i really like it 
Brokenness_is_Beautiful SILVER said...
on Nov. 14 2011 at 8:48 am
Brokenness_is_Beautiful SILVER, Independece, Louisiana
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Life is so ironic to understand fully, it takes sadness to know what is happiness. noise to distinguish silent and a broken heart to find true love.

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I would have been 8 then. I wasn't really worried about being poetic back then, I just wanted to write.
Brokenness_is_Beautiful SILVER said...
on Nov. 14 2011 at 8:47 am
Brokenness_is_Beautiful SILVER, Independece, Louisiana
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Life is so ironic to understand fully, it takes sadness to know what is happiness. noise to distinguish silent and a broken heart to find true love.

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It was one of my first poems...I may build another one off of this one, but I will not change it... I think I wrote it in '06
NorthernWriter said...
on Nov. 11 2011 at 5:48 pm
NorthernWriter, Fargo, North Dakota
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I like the idea of a "Dead "I love you""...overall, the poem was deep with emotion. poetically, however, I think it could have improved with better word choice and poem qualities. The emotion is already there and strong, but you can strengthen it with stronger words! Good job and keep writing!
Brokenness_is_Beautiful SILVER said...
on Nov. 4 2011 at 11:36 am
Brokenness_is_Beautiful SILVER, Independece, Louisiana
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Thanks. All of you are so amazing!
sunny.all.day. GOLD said...
on Nov. 3 2011 at 7:55 pm
sunny.all.day. GOLD, Potomac, Maryland
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&quot;If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day so I never have to live without you.&quot;<br /> &mdash; A.A. Milne (Winnie-the-Pooh)<br /> &quot;writing is a struggle against silence&quot; carlos fuentos<br /> You miss 100% of the shots you don&#039;t take.&quot;

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My favorite line in this is "to write in my book/titles Alone and Stupid." The flow is a bit choppy but the emotions feel really raw. Oh gosh. I feel like an english teacher. bleh. well, Good job! 
J4Yc3 GOLD said...
on Nov. 3 2011 at 5:09 pm
J4Yc3 GOLD, Nashville, Indiana
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amazing job

 

Brokenness_is_Beautiful SILVER said...
on Oct. 28 2011 at 9:55 am
Brokenness_is_Beautiful SILVER, Independece, Louisiana
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Thanks everybody!

 

SoulName said...
on Mar. 6 2011 at 10:08 am
SoulName, Oxon Hill, Maryland
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i love this simply because i feel im right their with you
MorningStar15 DIAMOND said...
on Mar. 5 2011 at 7:52 pm
MorningStar15 DIAMOND, Orange, Vermont
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I love the emotion, you really display it well! it reallt gets the attention of the reader, and makes them feel it too.
Mayim12 BRONZE said...
on Mar. 5 2011 at 5:55 pm
Mayim12 BRONZE, Elk Grove, California
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Simple. <3
jcampgirl PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 5 2011 at 1:26 pm
jcampgirl PLATINUM, New Caney, Texas
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i love this it is varry deap, i under stand and relate to it. thanks for posting
Mz.Minny2011 SILVER said...
on Mar. 5 2011 at 12:59 pm
Mz.Minny2011 SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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looove this!!!!
M.Kimmi BRONZE said...
on Mar. 4 2011 at 4:20 pm
M.Kimmi BRONZE, New York, New York
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LOVELY descriptions about lies! :DDD
HannSawyer15 BRONZE said...
on Mar. 4 2011 at 6:55 am
HannSawyer15 BRONZE, North Brunswick, New Jersey
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I like it! :)