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Death in a Bottle

November 22, 2010
By alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

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Drinking his gluttony, lies, and fate,
It’s his life the bottle will take.
Depression, tears, and bruises surround him.
He drinks away his pain and numbs them.
The feelings are fake, over his life they take.

Running away from his problems,
Yet running into deadly sins.
Depression, scars, and anger devour him.
He drinks away his aches and numbs them.
Many have been where he is – near the sins.

To his seat he wobbled,
Pushing the gas full throttle.
Bad memories and his broken family remind him,
To drink away his hurts and numb them,
Until he goes full throttle.

And finishes his Death in a Bottle.

© Molly L., Bethesda, MD

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alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 2 2011 at 12:19 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

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Haha thank you yeah i try and i like it when i comment on other people's pieces and they reply back so i do the same!
DeannaAnn GOLD said...
on Jan. 1 2011 at 5:58 pm
DeannaAnn GOLD, Moorseville, North Carolina
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The greatest thing youll ever learn is just to love and be loved in return. -Moulin Rouge

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i love that you reply to everyone. that is great. :D
alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 29 2010 at 1:04 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

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Thank you and yeah someone else mentioned that about the rhyming and if you kinda use your imagination you can hear the rhyme but thank you again i may just revise it some to make it better definately
nickykens ELITE said...
on Dec. 27 2010 at 12:38 pm
nickykens ELITE, Draper, Utah
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Fantastic, the idea overall is good and I love the Death in a Bottle theme.  The rhymes seem... trivial?, for lack of better word.  I recommend some revising, and it will be perfect.
alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 27 2010 at 12:27 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

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thanks so much! i'm glad you liked it!
alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 27 2010 at 12:08 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

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Wow really? thank you! that really means a lot to me and yes! I'd love to look at some of your poetry i look at some now!!!
alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 27 2010 at 12:04 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

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Yeah  i see wat your saying and i hear the awkwardness that you're talkin about but i wasn't really going for a meter more of a rhyme scheme which - i guess if you use your imagination - you could hear
alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 26 2010 at 10:02 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

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Thank you I appreciate it!!! :)
alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 26 2010 at 10:00 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

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Aw thanks that means a lot to me i hope it does too but if not I'll just keep trying! :D
MeaganNicole PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 26 2010 at 7:10 pm
MeaganNicole PLATINUM, Louisville, Kentucky
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This is fantastic! Amazing concept and the metaphor of "death in a bottle" is really something to think about. Great job :D
fallen-angle GOLD said...
on Dec. 26 2010 at 4:46 pm
fallen-angle GOLD, Cleburn, Texas
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hey i wright like you do i love your poetry it grabs my heart and soul leaving me breathless wishing for more i would be verry happy if u read some of my poetry
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD said...
on Dec. 25 2010 at 7:40 pm
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD, Martinsville, New Jersey
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nice, the description was good.  i think you mentioned depression twice though, and in such a short poem i wouldn't advise it. it also seems like you tried to make it rhyme, but it was inconsistent and therefore felt awkward. is sort of... off beat.
Kai17 GOLD said...
on Dec. 25 2010 at 2:06 pm
Kai17 GOLD, Spokane, Washington
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This is so brilliant; it describes it perfectly. I love your work!
DeannaAnn GOLD said...
on Dec. 25 2010 at 1:49 pm
DeannaAnn GOLD, Moorseville, North Carolina
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very very good. i hope this makes it to the magazine.
alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 23 2010 at 12:01 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

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Thank you! I'm glad you think so :)
AlexaConnor33 GOLD said...
on Dec. 22 2010 at 11:58 pm
AlexaConnor33 GOLD, Clackamas, Oregon
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This is amazing.
alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 22 2010 at 9:05 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

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Definately! I look at some of your work now!!!
ToRemember SILVER said...
on Dec. 22 2010 at 7:30 pm
ToRemember SILVER, Somersworth, New Hampshire
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your very very welcome! (: i would love it if you looked at some of my work, that'd be great to have your opinion!
alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 22 2010 at 7:06 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

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Wow thank you so much! Your opinion means so much to me!!! Thanks again :) I'm very happy that you like this!
ToRemember SILVER said...
on Dec. 22 2010 at 6:37 pm
ToRemember SILVER, Somersworth, New Hampshire
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dont ever tell me the sky&#039;s the limit when there are footprints on the moon.

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This blew me away. AMAZING i loved every bit of it, you have potential!!!!!