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Unremorseful

October 23, 2010
By Dragonscribe BRONZE, West Lafayette, Indiana
Dragonscribe BRONZE, West Lafayette, Indiana
4 articles 0 photos 303 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A Person's a Person no Matter how Small"
and
"A Rose by Any Other Name Would Smell as Sweet"
and
"God helps those who help themselves"


Twice a day they feed me gruel;
Always gentle, never cruel.
Sometimes they stop to talk,
Then shut the door and check the lock.

Quiet is my mind most days
Listening to the prisoner’s bays
Who wish there was more time
To sit idle and eat their grime.

I am neither here nor there about the clock
When upon my door comes the final knock.
Why should I number my days?
At least then I will feel the sun’s rays.

Inside my cell I am cold and bleak.
Of repentance and remorse I do not reek.
Nor do I scream of death and crime,
Saying all will pay who made me serve the time.

This is why guards shoot me smiles;
Comb my hair and wash the tiles.
Who is this who speaks not a word?
Who sits there almost bored?

This is I: the one true coward,
The one who hated ‘til I soured,
Then was still inside my cell, and never thought
Of the suffering I have brought.

My time to kill is over now,
And still I do not allow the final bow
And repent to save my life;
Utter any words of guilt for death and strife.

The day I die I’ll meet the gloom
That seals me in a frigid tomb,
Where teeth and bugs and fire wait.
I held my tongue – this is my fate.


The author's comments:
This is one of the darkest things I've written. I'm not sure I like it, but for some reason, I think it's kind of fun. To read, at least.

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Luthi3n GOLD said...
on Sep. 27 2022 at 9:40 pm
Luthi3n GOLD, Doriath, Minnesota
13 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A writer is a world trapped inside a person." —Victor Hugo

It would be nice if the poem showed more of the prisoner's thoughts, I'm curious what he did but even more than that why he's not repentant. Still, it's an interesting idea, to write from the perspective of this prisoner who just doesn't care anymore

on Jan. 12 2011 at 2:48 pm
yaa doss cool...what a bum yu lame-o. haha funnie. lollololololl lol

on Jan. 9 2011 at 5:13 pm
summerdreamer PLATINUM, Chapel Hill, North Carolina
28 articles 15 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Love isn't about loving someone who's perfect, it's about loving someone perfectly."
- I dont know who came up with it, I just saw it somewhere on facebook hehe

thats really good :)

on Jan. 5 2011 at 2:43 pm
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD, Martinsville, New Jersey
14 articles 1 photo 278 comments

Favorite Quote:
Worry is simply a misuse of the imagination.

by the search bar there is an advanced search button. click, then click the screen title option and type diamondsinthegrass... muchos gracias!!! 

on Jan. 5 2011 at 2:19 pm
Dragonscribe BRONZE, West Lafayette, Indiana
4 articles 0 photos 303 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A Person's a Person no Matter how Small"
and
"A Rose by Any Other Name Would Smell as Sweet"
and
"God helps those who help themselves"

Actually hey, how do you find other people's work? If you could tell me I'll check out your stuff.

on Jan. 5 2011 at 2:17 pm
Dragonscribe BRONZE, West Lafayette, Indiana
4 articles 0 photos 303 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A Person's a Person no Matter how Small"
and
"A Rose by Any Other Name Would Smell as Sweet"
and
"God helps those who help themselves"

Thanks! The honesty is great! Yes, I will check out your work if I can find it.

on Dec. 25 2010 at 4:15 pm
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD, Martinsville, New Jersey
14 articles 1 photo 278 comments

Favorite Quote:
Worry is simply a misuse of the imagination.

nice. just hope you don't mind when i say that i'm not particularly fond of this style.  actually, i'm not really fond of any rhyming poems.  but the ways you twisted the lines and sentences to make them rhyme were cool. do you mind taking a look at some of my work? and comment honestly? thanks.

on Dec. 10 2010 at 10:48 pm
Dragonscribe BRONZE, West Lafayette, Indiana
4 articles 0 photos 303 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A Person's a Person no Matter how Small"
and
"A Rose by Any Other Name Would Smell as Sweet"
and
"God helps those who help themselves"

Sure. I'm sorry about the argument - I get so fired up but you can't really tell I'm not all that angry when I'm writing.

TrinityCreed said...
on Dec. 10 2010 at 7:22 am
like i said b4, i want to correct the wrongs in my life. i know i was harsh and cold hearted to ppl on that site. but im against the sin, but i think i have come up with a solution: just say Bible verses and nothing else. i believe u would agree with me on that. if not tell me. but i dont think u would, but only i could guess.

on Dec. 9 2010 at 7:02 pm
Silvertext BRONZE, West Lafayette, Indiana
3 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imagination has rules, but we can only guess what they are." ~Mason Cooley

lol, yeah it's me, from your school... yay...!

~Silvertext


on Dec. 9 2010 at 4:11 pm
Dragonscribe BRONZE, West Lafayette, Indiana
4 articles 0 photos 303 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A Person's a Person no Matter how Small"
and
"A Rose by Any Other Name Would Smell as Sweet"
and
"God helps those who help themselves"

Well, yeah. I have strong values but no problem! Let's just say we can believe what we may and leave the rest to God. We can trust Him to decide anyways. Nice talking to you Travis, this was Jackie. 

on Dec. 9 2010 at 4:10 pm
Dragonscribe BRONZE, West Lafayette, Indiana
4 articles 0 photos 303 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A Person's a Person no Matter how Small"
and
"A Rose by Any Other Name Would Smell as Sweet"
and
"God helps those who help themselves"

Hey now! Is this you - kid from my school? Good to hear from you, Gmurph.

TrinityCreed said...
on Dec. 6 2010 at 8:52 am
this is very good. lets put the past behind us and move on from mistakes. my names Travis if u want to know, i already know wats ur name. i'll let u decide where u might want to go with this. being friends r not, that is. lets just say im trying to correct the wrongs in my life. i know i waz harsh to u, but its one of few things in life im against. i hope u get wat im tlking about. do u?

on Nov. 17 2010 at 7:51 pm
Silvertext BRONZE, West Lafayette, Indiana
3 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imagination has rules, but we can only guess what they are." ~Mason Cooley

Woah Jackie! This is amazingly deep, creative, and I absolutely loved it! Keep up the great work!

~Silvertext